Summarize the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they respond to the specific concerns presented in the reading passage.
The reading text and lecture are both deal with the possibility of sending human to Mars. While the writer is presenting a problem regarding to that mission, the lecturer is providing the easy solution of it. He stand out the scientists had already discover the technique to mitigate this problem.
First of all, the reading text stats that, it is very difficult to carry out the food, drinkable water and oxygen of the duration of two year. Because, cargo is having little capacity of carry goods. On the other hand, the lecturer is describe the new technology, which is "hydroponics", by this new innovation astronauts can grow their food without the need of soil. additionally, he said that, this people can recycle the irrigation water to use as a potable water and plant grow in this shuttle will absorb the Carbon Dioxide and releases the Oxygen to breath.
Secondly, the reading passage suggests that, men on this mission face severe medical problem in zero gravity zone. He note out that, Those men will face the problem like, reduction in muscle mass and lower down the bone density. In contrast to that, The speaker contends that, now a days many astronauts are staying in zero gravity zone for more than two months. He point out that, they developed several technique to mitigate this problem; like a regular exercise and taking the table of calcium and different mineral.
Lastly, The author believe that, radiation of charged particle is harming the astronauts. He also argues that, now a days it is iimpossible to develop the shiel which can protect them. on the opposite side the tutor stand out that, rsolar radiation are coming out in specific time and scientis are
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 213, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'stands'.
Suggestion: stands
...s providing the easy solution of it. He stand out the scientists had already discover...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 250, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'discovered'.
Suggestion: discovered
...He stand out the scientists had already discover the technique to mitigate this problem....
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 144, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...and oxygen of the duration of two year. Because, cargo is having little capacity of car...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 236, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'described'.
Suggestion: described
...ods. On the other hand, the lecturer is describe the new technology, which is 'hydr...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 307, Rule ID: NEW_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'innovation'.
Suggestion: innovation
...ich is 'hydroponics', by this new innovation astronauts can grow their food without ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 379, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Additionally
...ow their food without the need of soil. additionally, he said that, this people can recycle ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 407, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ed of soil. additionally, he said that, this people can recycle the irrigation water...
^^^^
Line 5, column 119, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'notes'.
Suggestion: notes
...edical problem in zero gravity zone. He note out that, Those men will face the probl...
^^^^
Line 5, column 278, Rule ID: NOW_A_DAYS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nowadays'?
Suggestion: nowadays
...ast to that, The speaker contends that, now a days many astronauts are staying in zero gra...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 282, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a day' or simply 'days'?
Suggestion: a day; days
...to that, The speaker contends that, now a days many astronauts are staying in zero gra...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 367, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'points'.
Suggestion: points
...avity zone for more than two months. He point out that, they developed several techni...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 398, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun technique seems to be countable; consider using: 'several techniques'.
Suggestion: several techniques
...nths. He point out that, they developed several technique to mitigate this problem; like a regula...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 112, Rule ID: NOW_A_DAYS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nowadays'?
Suggestion: nowadays
...ng the astronauts. He also argues that, now a days it is iimpossible to develop the shiel ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 116, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a day' or simply 'days'?
Suggestion: a day; days
...he astronauts. He also argues that, now a days it is iimpossible to develop the shiel ...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 186, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: On
...velop the shiel which can protect them. on the opposite side the tutor stand out t...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, lastly, regarding, second, secondly, so, while, in contrast, first of all, in contrast to, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 22.412803532 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 30.3222958057 135% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1415.0 1373.03311258 103% => OK
No of words: 287.0 270.72406181 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93031358885 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65589348979 2.5805825403 103% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 145.348785872 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574912891986 0.540411800872 106% => OK
syllable_count: 439.2 419.366225166 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 3.25607064018 276% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.5404444641 49.2860985944 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.071428571 110.228320801 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5 21.698381199 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.92857142857 7.06452816374 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 4.19205298013 358% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0764485534242 0.272083759551 28% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0290019125064 0.0996497079465 29% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0337429880816 0.0662205650399 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0490307017085 0.162205337803 30% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0296202671666 0.0443174109184 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.3589403974 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 53.8541721854 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.2367328918 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.42419426049 102% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 63.6247240618 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 213, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'stands'.
Suggestion: stands
...s providing the easy solution of it. He stand out the scientists had already discover...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 250, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'discovered'.
Suggestion: discovered
...He stand out the scientists had already discover the technique to mitigate this problem....
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 144, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...and oxygen of the duration of two year. Because, cargo is having little capacity of car...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 236, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'described'.
Suggestion: described
...ods. On the other hand, the lecturer is describe the new technology, which is 'hydr...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 307, Rule ID: NEW_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'innovation'.
Suggestion: innovation
...ich is 'hydroponics', by this new innovation astronauts can grow their food without ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 379, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Additionally
...ow their food without the need of soil. additionally, he said that, this people can recycle ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 407, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ed of soil. additionally, he said that, this people can recycle the irrigation water...
^^^^
Line 5, column 119, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'notes'.
Suggestion: notes
...edical problem in zero gravity zone. He note out that, Those men will face the probl...
^^^^
Line 5, column 278, Rule ID: NOW_A_DAYS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nowadays'?
Suggestion: nowadays
...ast to that, The speaker contends that, now a days many astronauts are staying in zero gra...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 282, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a day' or simply 'days'?
Suggestion: a day; days
...to that, The speaker contends that, now a days many astronauts are staying in zero gra...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 367, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'points'.
Suggestion: points
...avity zone for more than two months. He point out that, they developed several techni...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 398, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun technique seems to be countable; consider using: 'several techniques'.
Suggestion: several techniques
...nths. He point out that, they developed several technique to mitigate this problem; like a regula...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 112, Rule ID: NOW_A_DAYS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nowadays'?
Suggestion: nowadays
...ng the astronauts. He also argues that, now a days it is iimpossible to develop the shiel ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 116, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a day' or simply 'days'?
Suggestion: a day; days
...he astronauts. He also argues that, now a days it is iimpossible to develop the shiel ...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 186, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: On
...velop the shiel which can protect them. on the opposite side the tutor stand out t...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, lastly, regarding, second, secondly, so, while, in contrast, first of all, in contrast to, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 22.412803532 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 30.3222958057 135% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1415.0 1373.03311258 103% => OK
No of words: 287.0 270.72406181 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93031358885 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65589348979 2.5805825403 103% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 145.348785872 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574912891986 0.540411800872 106% => OK
syllable_count: 439.2 419.366225166 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 3.25607064018 276% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.5404444641 49.2860985944 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.071428571 110.228320801 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5 21.698381199 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.92857142857 7.06452816374 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 4.19205298013 358% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0764485534242 0.272083759551 28% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0290019125064 0.0996497079465 29% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0337429880816 0.0662205650399 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0490307017085 0.162205337803 30% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0296202671666 0.0443174109184 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.3589403974 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 53.8541721854 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.2367328918 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.42419426049 102% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 63.6247240618 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.