TPO-28 - Integrated Writing Task
In the reading passage, the author holds the opinion that the famous adventure, Robert E. Peary’s travel to the north arctic is true and list out three reasons for supporting this claims. However, in the lecture, the professor takes a totally different point of view with the author and stated that the mentioned reasons are unconvincing and refuted them one by one.
First of all, in the reading passage, the author points out that the Peary expedition to the North Pole was approved by the National Geographic Society in that time. In the lecture, the professor acknowledges this, but she states that the members of the aforementioned committee were not completely objective. She stated that the committee was composed of the Peary's friends and they did not examine his evidence carefully.
Secondly, the author stated that a recent expedition provided more support for Peary's claim where the other adventure, Avery, by using the same kind of dogsled in the same number reached to the pole in the time same as the time in it the Peary reached to the pole previously. On the contrary, the professor put forward that in Avery's travel the food was provided by the airplane, while this condition did not exist for the Peary and pulling the food made their trip more difficult. Besides, it is stated that the weather condition in the time of Peary’s travel was more severe than the condition that exists in Avery's expedition.
Finally, according to the writer, the images that provided by Peary can be used for approving his claims and it can be substantiated by measuring the shadows in Peary's photographs. The lecturer, on the other hand, put forth the claim that the mentioned pictures cannot prove anything. She states that the camera which was used at that time did not has sufficient quality. What is more, the quality of Surf shadow changed by passing the time. So, it is declared that they are not so accurate for reaching exact result about Peary's travel to the North Pole.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 126, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... claim where the other adventure, Avery, by using the same kind of dogsled in the...
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Line 4, column 348, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
...era which was used at that time did not has sufficient quality. What is more, the q...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, finally, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, while, kind of, first of all, on the contrary, what is more, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 12.0772626932 141% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 22.412803532 138% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 30.3222958057 129% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1656.0 1373.03311258 121% => OK
No of words: 339.0 270.72406181 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88495575221 5.08290768461 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.04702891845 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55354677039 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 145.348785872 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.480825958702 0.540411800872 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 519.3 419.366225166 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 2.5761589404 311% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 21.2450331126 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.3520271668 49.2860985944 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.285714286 110.228320801 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2142857143 21.698381199 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2142857143 7.06452816374 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.383184192143 0.272083759551 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127067487043 0.0996497079465 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106979429864 0.0662205650399 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.230715106078 0.162205337803 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0763562640703 0.0443174109184 172% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.3589403974 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 53.8541721854 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.0289183223 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 12.2367328918 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.42419426049 102% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 63.6247240618 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.498013245 110% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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