TPO-30 - Integrated Writing Task

The reading passage describes an innovative weapon that was used by the Greeks called a "burning mirror" and provided three reasons about why it is not practical and the Greeks never had such a device. However, the professor in the listening part cast doubt on these reasons.

According to the reading, firstly, the Greeks didn't have the essential technology to build a device like that, but the lecturer argued this since it is feasible if they created a large parabolic sheet using many small pieces.

Secondly, Romans had other materials on their ships besides wood such as a sticky substance called pitch that would take only some seconds to set on fire/ to ignite.

Lastly, the Roman soldiers were watching for the Greeks' flaming arrows but a light ray can't be seen and was much more surprising. So, using those mirrors was more effective than shooting flaming arrows to set fire to the ships.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 87, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...apon that was used by the Greeks called a 'burning mirror' and provided...
^
Line 3, column 47, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...ing to the reading, firstly, the Greeks didnt have the essential technology to build ...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 88, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...e Greeks flaming arrows but a light ray cant be seen and was much more surprising. S...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, firstly, however, if, lastly, second, secondly, so, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 12.0772626932 25% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 22.412803532 45% => OK
Preposition: 15.0 30.3222958057 49% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 764.0 1373.03311258 56% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 154.0 270.72406181 57% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96103896104 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.52273666998 4.04702891845 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4652073803 2.5805825403 96% => OK
Unique words: 112.0 145.348785872 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.727272727273 0.540411800872 135% => OK
syllable_count: 230.4 419.366225166 55% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.23620309051 49% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 13.0662251656 46% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 21.2450331126 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.9016994375 49.2860985944 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.333333333 110.228320801 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6666666667 21.698381199 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.3333333333 7.06452816374 189% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.388937775164 0.272083759551 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.149522785505 0.0996497079465 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0797090753691 0.0662205650399 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183749706586 0.162205337803 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0493000764575 0.0443174109184 111% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.3589403974 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 53.8541721854 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.0289183223 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.2367328918 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.29 8.42419426049 110% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 63.6247240618 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.7273730684 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.498013245 114% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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