You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of the quality of your writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and their relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an eff

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You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of the quality of your writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and their relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words.

The passage thinks that although there remains some possibility in sending humans to Mars. It still has many problems to overcome during the process. However, the lecture challenge the thoughts in the passage from many aspect.

First, the passage thinks that it will take a long time to travel to the Mars, and the space craft will not have enough place for people to store their food and drink. However, the lecture came up with an idea that we could use oxygen-package to maintain our energy and it call also help us cultivate plants by ourselves in the space craft. In addition, we could also drink the water. Therefore, the question of storing food is successfully solved.

Then, the passage mention the zero-gravity environment in the space, the writer thinks that it might be difficult for people to live in that environment for a long time. According to this point, the lecture think that it has already been many space station in the outer-space. These centers could lead people how to deal with that environment and train them accepting it. Thus, the living environment could not be a big problem.

At last, the writer worries about the radiation in the space. Yet, the lecture think that people also have no worry about this because the outer-space has shield area, which could offer us a place to hide from the radiation. When the radiation is gone, we could go out of the shield and continue our journey.

Therefore, the speaker in the lecture don't think the questions in the passage is not totally inevitable, on the contrary, he think that all the problems could find a better solution to deal with it.

Votes
Average: 0.3 (1 vote)
Essay Categories
Integrated TOEFL Writing

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 215, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun aspect seems to be countable; consider using: 'many aspects'.
Suggestion: many aspects
...llenge the thoughts in the passage from many aspect. First, the passage thinks that it w...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 59, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... thinks that it will take a long time to travel to the Mars, and the space craft ...
^^
Line 3, column 275, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'calls'?
Suggestion: calls
...n-package to maintain our energy and it call also help us cultivate plants by oursel...
^^^^
Line 9, column 39, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... Therefore, the speaker in the lecture dont think the questions in the passage is n...
^^^^
Line 9, column 126, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'thinks'.
Suggestion: thinks
...totally inevitable, on the contrary, he think that all the problems could find a bett...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, so, still, then, therefore, thus, in addition, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 5.04856512141 198% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 22.412803532 134% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 30.3222958057 115% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 5.01324503311 239% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1348.0 1373.03311258 98% => OK
No of words: 281.0 270.72406181 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79715302491 5.08290768461 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47552833226 2.5805825403 96% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 145.348785872 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523131672598 0.540411800872 97% => OK
syllable_count: 406.8 419.366225166 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.23620309051 146% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.4906592021 49.2860985944 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.8666666667 110.228320801 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7333333333 21.698381199 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.86666666667 7.06452816374 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0543917058224 0.272083759551 20% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0186562101725 0.0996497079465 19% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.019111775508 0.0662205650399 29% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0295203264665 0.162205337803 18% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0159687025503 0.0443174109184 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 13.3589403974 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 53.8541721854 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 11.0289183223 72% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 12.2367328918 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.11 8.42419426049 84% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 63.6247240618 72% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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