Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In my view, combining with the current situation that modern technology has been used wider and wider in our daily life. Movies and television have more positive effects on the way young people behave. I have some evidences to support my position.
Last summer, I went back to my high school to visit my former teacher. In the new classroom, I was shocked by the facilities which the classroom has owned. Every student command an ipad by his or her on. At the same time, in the front of the classroom, it is a large television. Teacher put on her slides in the television, so that everyone can see her manuscript about this class. Through using the ipad, the students can come up their assignments, also, through the data calculating by the computer, the teacher can know which point children is easy to misunderstood. I have another example, since in the past, when we have a biology class, the teacher will draw a DNA model by herself when she illustrate the construction of DNA. However, nowadays everything seems to change, in a small movies made by the teacher, the construction of DNA can be vividly showed in the television. We can know how the small molecules move, what is the process of construction period. This is great because most of the children have a deeper impression on it. Well, what I want to say is that, my high school is one of the common schools in our city. Therefore, we can generally conclude that this kind of teaching method has been introduced widely in high school now. Also, my former headmaster told me that this kind of modern method has a good effect on students. In that way, I suppose that movies and television have been used more often than the previous time, and students can largely benefit from the vivid performance on the television. Thus, generally it will have a positive effects on young people behave.
However, at the same time, I also wonder about a point that why we used to think television and movies have more negative effects. I generally conclude the reasons from such aspects, the first, in previous time, television has not been widely introduced to everyone's life so people will feel curious about this kind of fresh elements. The time has changed, no one will feel very excited about owning a cell-phone any more. In that way, children will not be likely to addicted to movies and television at all. The second reason is that, according to the correct instruction by teacher, the children will have a better understanding of using television, therefore, the children will not think first to treat the television as a entertainment tool. At the same time, there also have evidence to show that by using modern equipment, the efficient has been largely increasing.
In all, the time has changed, and we could not treat the movies and television as our old concept. And the current situation shows that young people will be largely benefit from this kind of change. What should we do is to confront with such kind of development.
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- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 698, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'illustrates'.
Suggestion: illustrates
...ll draw a DNA model by herself when she illustrate the construction of DNA. However, nowad...
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Line 3, column 791, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'movie'?
Suggestion: movie
... everything seems to change, in a small movies made by the teacher, the construction o...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 725, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... think first to treat the television as a entertainment tool. At the same time, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, second, so, therefore, thus, well, i suppose, kind of, such as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2475.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 522.0 407.700716846 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74137931034 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77988695657 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62890047682 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.446360153257 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 767.7 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 11.0 3.08781362007 356% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 15.0 4.94265232975 303% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.3132456071 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.6666666667 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3333333333 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.7037037037 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221877266904 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0717845086165 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108930687819 0.0737576698707 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16807548745 0.150856017488 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0816240738099 0.0645574589148 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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