reading passage is about the reduction of literature readers - mahdieh
In this set of material the reading passage is about the reduction of literature readers and the listening passage was a lecture by a professor discussing about the ideas of reading passage. The discussions mentioned in the listening passage disagrees with the ideas of reading passage.
According to the reading passage, the audience of literature has been reduced in comparison to prior times. The author believes that this problem would have an effect on the nowadays culture; also, the author believes that reading literature has an important influence on training imagination, to feel what the main role in a novel feels and empathy with them and also reading improves our ability to understand the human way of communicate.
According to the listening passage, professor has this idea that even though the literature including poems, novels, has been reading less lately, it doesn't affect stimulating imagination because the science lectures and books in general have that impact too and she didn't agree with this opinion that listening to a music or watching a movie is a waste of time. She believes that culture has been changed; however it doesn't mean that it has been reduced in quality. She also thinks that one of the reasons literature is not supported that much today is about the authors themselves and it's not the readers’ fault that it's not understandable.
Overall, the ideas presented in the listening passage disagrees with the reading passage.
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- do you agree or disagree with this statement?Teachers should not make their social or political views known to students in the classroom. 80
- the best way to travel is in group led by a tour guide - sohrab 60
- reading passage was about an expression, salvage logging - mahdihe 70
the ideas presented in the listening passage disagrees with the reading passage.
the ideas ... disagree with the ideas in the reading passage.
flaws:
The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Don't need to reiterate the contents of reading passages or as less as possible.
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 20 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 8 12
No. of Words: 242 250
No. of Characters: 1206 1200
No. of Different Words: 117 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.944 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.983 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.65 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 89 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 80 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 43 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 33 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 30.25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 17.633 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.492 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.742 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.26 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4