The following appeared in the editorial section of a health and fitness magazine. "In a study of the effects of exercise on longevity, medical researchers tracked 500 middle-aged men over a 20-year period. The subjects represented a variety of occupations in several different parts of the country and responded to an annual survey in which they were asked: How often and how strenuously do you exercise? Of those who responded, the men who reported that they engaged in vigorous outdoor exercise nearly every day lived longer than the men who reported that they exercised mildly only once or twice a week. Given the clear link that this study establishes between longevity and exercise, doctors should not recommend moderate exercise to their patients but should instead encourage vigorous outdoor exercise on a daily basis. " Discuss how well reasoned you find this argument.
The author of this argument claims that the doctor should encourage his patient to vigorous outdoor exercise instead moderate exercise. To support this recommendation the author cites the following facts. A research tracked wit 500 middle-age man from different country over 20 period years, show that men who do vigorous exercise outdoor physical activity lived longer. Close scrutiny of each of these facts, however, reveals that none of them lend credible supports to this recommendation.
First, the argument claims without any warrant that what was true in the past would be true in the future. This research’s result is related on a limited period, and surly; we cannot consider it as a good criterion to decide for the future. It is entirely possible that in 20 years people’s economic condition is the same, but the author does not provide information to show that condition is stable during the time.
Second, the author provides no assurance that the survey on which the argument depends is statistically reliable. If the survey’s respondents are not representative of the overall population of people with the different age groups, the author cannot rely on it to conclude that vigorous outdoor exercise can increase everyone’s life. A research should contain enough people, while in this matter; perhaps the number of respondents was too low to ensure that the author's conclusion will be correct. In addition, the research sample should reflect the statistical population, but the research ignored that the result can be different for women.
Third, the argument relies on the assumption that the middle-age men lived longer just because of the vigorous outdoor exercise. However, it is entirely possible that the longevity was due to factors such as having access the better medical cares, suitable economic condition, healthy foods, and that these problems have not been remedied. In fact, perhaps people who take part in this research and do not live longer were in the poor countries, and the healthy food or medical cares were not put at their disposal. In this way, the rate of mortality among these people was higher than other countries. Since the author has not dearly identified the cause of the longevity, I cannot be convinced that vigorous outside physical activities can help human to live longer.
In the fourth place, based on the fact that strong outdoor exercise increases the people life, the author infers that it would be useful for patients. However, this is not necessarily the case. It is possible that these physical activities are dangerous for patients, or at least for some of them. Moreover, the research does not mention vigorous outdoor exercise is more beneficial than moderate exercise. To the extent that this is the case, then the author’s suggestion that hard outside exercises are useful for patient health is doubtful.
In sum, this argument is flowed and therefore unconvincing it stands. To strengthen the author must provide clear evidence of conditions that participants live there. In addition, to evaluate author’s conclusion, we would need more researches, which track women and people from different group age.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 372, Rule ID: CLOSE_SCRUTINY[1]
Message: Use simply 'scrutiny'.
Suggestion: Scrutiny
...outdoor physical activity lived longer. Close scrutiny of each of these facts, however, reveal...
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Line 3, column 473, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...pondents was too low to ensure that the authors conclusion will be correct. In addition...
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Line 6, column 305, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...en and people from different group age.
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'moreover', 'second', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'third', 'while', 'as to', 'at least', 'in addition', 'in fact', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.234006734007 0.25644967241 91% => OK
Verbs: 0.13468013468 0.15541462614 87% => OK
Adjectives: 0.124579124579 0.0836205057962 149% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0538720538721 0.0520304965353 104% => OK
Pronouns: 0.023569023569 0.0272364105082 87% => OK
Prepositions: 0.117845117845 0.125424944231 94% => OK
Participles: 0.016835016835 0.0416121511921 40% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.77461845817 2.79052419416 99% => OK
Infinitives: 0.020202020202 0.026700313972 76% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.117845117845 0.113004496875 104% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.023569023569 0.0255425247493 92% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.010101010101 0.0127820249294 79% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3213.0 2731.13054187 118% => OK
No of words: 511.0 446.07635468 115% => OK
Chars per words: 6.28767123288 6.12365571057 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75450408675 4.57801047555 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.432485322896 0.378187486979 114% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.315068493151 0.287650121315 110% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.225048923679 0.208842608468 108% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.127201565558 0.135150697306 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77461845817 2.79052419416 99% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 207.018472906 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504892367906 0.469332199767 108% => OK
Word variations: 59.9733373199 52.1807786196 115% => OK
How many sentences: 24.0 20.039408867 120% => OK
Sentence length: 21.2916666667 23.2022227129 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.6653943835 57.7814097925 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.875 141.986410481 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2916666667 23.2022227129 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.666666666667 0.724660767414 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.14285714286 117% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 3.58251231527 84% => OK
Readability: 52.7985159817 51.9672348444 102% => OK
Elegance: 1.7380952381 1.8405768891 94% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.432104076781 0.441005458295 98% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0947067454165 0.135418324435 70% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0651403334445 0.0829849096947 78% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.562779927977 0.58762219726 96% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.109526174394 0.147661913831 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.179569214257 0.193483328276 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0769672948923 0.0970749176394 79% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.40957510814 0.42659136922 96% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.14553744911 0.0774707102158 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.291469545066 0.312017818177 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0769992612396 0.0698173142475 110% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.33743842365 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.87684729064 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.82512315271 83% => OK
Positive topic words: 12.0 6.46551724138 186% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 5.36822660099 93% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.82389162562 71% => OK
Total topic words: 19.0 14.657635468 130% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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