A jazz music club in Monroe would be a tremendously profitable enterprise. At present, the nearest jazz club is over 60 miles away from Monroe; thus, our proposed club, the C Note, would have the local market all to itself. In addition, there is ample evidence of the popularity of jazz in Monroe: over 100,000 people attended Monroe's jazz festival last summer, several well-known jazz musicians live in Monroe, and the highest-rated radio program in Monroe is 'Jazz Nightly.' Finally, a nationwide study indicates that the typical jazz fan spends close to $1,000 per year on jazz entertainment. We therefore predict that the C Note cannot help but make money.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The argument surmises that the new C Note jazz club will gain a big profit in the Monroe. To support this assumption, the author reveals examples of leap of faith, poor reasoning, and distorted view of the situation. Hence the argument is unconvincing.
First of all, the author posits that the distance of the 60 miles away from the present jazz club is an adequate length for the C Note club to have its local market. However, this is a vague surmise. There is a list of unwarranted question about this assumption. For instance, what is the present service capacity? Or what scoop of area does the current club cover? Maybe, the service of the current club includes the local with a radiation of 100 miles; in this case, the 60 miles distance is not a sufficient distance for the C Note club to appeal its consumers and make its market. Without addressing this question with the concrete data about the present club statue and its service scoop, it is a facial claim.
Next, the writer posits that the jazz music is the most popular music among the people, for the sake of high participant in Monroe's jazz festival last summer and the dwelling of the famous jazz musicians in the Monroe. These assertions cannot be accepted as they stand. The argument could have been much fortified if it explicitly answered these questions. First, did whole or the significant portion of the attenders were the dwellers of the Monroe? Perhaps, the other people from the near cities, how are the fan of the jazz music, attended the festival. Second, does the main reason of well-known jazz musicians living in the Monroe is the popularity of the jazz music in this city? Perhaps, this location possesses a cool weather which appeals the people, or its housing cost is lower than the other area.
Finally, the article mentions to the nationwide survey, which demonstrates the jazz fans are prone to spend 1.000 $ for jazz entertainment yearly and overgeneralized its outcome to Monroe's inhabitants. This study and accuracy of its outcome in this city would have been more convincing, if the text mentioned to the several questions about the Monroe people's financial status, and validity of this study in the Monroe. For instance, what is the people's financial standing? Or how much the people in this city earn yearly? Maybe their annual incomes do not exceed 2.000$; in this scenario, the expense of 1.000$ for the jazz entertainment is too much.
All in all, the argument is flawed for the reason above-mentioned and is; therefore, unpersuasive. It could be considerably strengthened if the author clearly addresses the aforementioned questions. Without this information, the argument remains unsubstantiated and open to debates.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Hence,
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Suggestion: $000
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Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$000'.
Suggestion: $000
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Suggestion: $000
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Discourse Markers used:
['finally', 'first', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'well', 'for instance', 'first of all']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.275280898876 0.25644967241 107% => OK
Verbs: 0.10861423221 0.15541462614 70% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0823970037453 0.0836205057962 99% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0430711610487 0.0520304965353 83% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0224719101124 0.0272364105082 83% => OK
Prepositions: 0.106741573034 0.125424944231 85% => OK
Participles: 0.0205992509363 0.0416121511921 50% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.79045344609 2.79052419416 100% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0149812734082 0.026700313972 56% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.159176029963 0.113004496875 141% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00936329588015 0.0255425247493 37% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0131086142322 0.0127820249294 103% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2757.0 2731.13054187 101% => OK
No of words: 460.0 446.07635468 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.99347826087 6.12365571057 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6311565067 4.57801047555 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.34347826087 0.378187486979 91% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.267391304348 0.287650121315 93% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.182608695652 0.208842608468 87% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.115217391304 0.135150697306 85% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79045344609 2.79052419416 100% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 207.018472906 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491304347826 0.469332199767 105% => OK
Word variations: 55.9044645169 52.1807786196 107% => OK
How many sentences: 25.0 20.039408867 125% => OK
Sentence length: 18.4 23.2022227129 79% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.0565792999 57.7814097925 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.28 141.986410481 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4 23.2022227129 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.52 0.724660767414 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 3.58251231527 112% => OK
Readability: 45.1391304348 51.9672348444 87% => OK
Elegance: 2.31182795699 1.8405768891 126% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.460115598131 0.441005458295 104% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.109595899358 0.135418324435 81% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0748856578264 0.0829849096947 90% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.56222267232 0.58762219726 96% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.201644855525 0.147661913831 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.185740821485 0.193483328276 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107380187493 0.0970749176394 111% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.528433877227 0.42659136922 124% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0799033150286 0.0774707102158 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.32235133308 0.312017818177 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0595699469074 0.0698173142475 85% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.33743842365 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.87684729064 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.82512315271 104% => OK
Positive topic words: 6.0 6.46551724138 93% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 5.36822660099 93% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.82389162562 106% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 14.657635468 96% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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