Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Has the telephone the greater influence on people's lives than television has?
Throughout history, telephone and television have played a prominent role in all societies. Due to its paramount importance in the communication between people. A controversial question which is often raised regarding this idea is that television has the greater influence on people's lives than television. In my perspective, I firmly believe that telephone has a prominent influence on people's live than television. In the following paragraph, I will pinpoint the most outstanding reasons.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that telephone has a great impact on people' communication. Although this matter may have some disadvantages, for instance , the new version of the telephone which we called them mobile or wireless telephone have some side effect on our brain. I believe that the benefits out weight the drawbacks. The personal experience as an example, when I was the child we did not have a telephone in our home. Although I liked my grandmother and tended to talk with her most of the time, I could not contact with her until the weekend. On the other hand, when we grew up the telephone came to our city and we can talk with our families easily. Therefore I believe that the telephone has a significant and undeniable role in one's life.
Another equally noteworthy point in supporting my opinion is that it shift people' attitude, knowledge, and our practice. After the invention of a cell the phone or mobile and the internet recently, we can find a huge impact in people ‘life. This change has been started after the evolution of various kind of telephone become appear, and this change has been progressive more rapidly than one's can think. To illustrate, I would like to mention some available statistics about this issue. The result of a survey conducted recently in our country reveals that more than 87 percent of Iranian people have an access to the cell phone, mobile, telephone. The result can easily support the statement mentioned above. Also, the result of a study conducted in my country indicate that cell phone and some social application groups, which install in them (like a telegram, skype, what is up, etc.) , increase people knowledge very rapidly . Through their invaluable study, it has been substantiated that cell phone with social groups application increase people knowledge, attitude, practice about better and healthier lifestyle. In the aforementioned study, one of the items that explicate in it is the existence of direct relationships between the access of social groups contact and knowledge about some high-risk behaviors like cigarette smoking, alcohol, salt and fat consumption. It is confirmed that accessibility to the cell phone may give people more chance to increase their information.
Taking all aforementioned into account, it can be concluded that the invention of the telephone opens a new ways for people life. It has the great impact in various aspect of life, for instance, type of relationship, social communication, social well-being, and finally their knowledge, attitude, and finally their way their practice in their societies.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'finally', 'first', 'if', 'may', 'regarding', 'so', 'therefore', 'well', 'for instance', 'kind of', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.267730496454 0.229887763892 116% => OK
Verbs: 0.129432624113 0.158761421928 82% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0709219858156 0.0866891130778 82% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0301418439716 0.046263068375 65% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0709219858156 0.0685040099705 104% => OK
Prepositions: 0.129432624113 0.118717715034 109% => OK
Participles: 0.0265957446809 0.0351676179071 76% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.94862832748 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0159574468085 0.0309702414327 52% => OK
Particles: 0.00531914893617 0.00188951952338 282% => OK
Determiners: 0.108156028369 0.0887237588012 122% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0177304964539 0.0209618222197 85% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0124113475177 0.0139019557991 89% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3122.0 2387.08602151 131% => OK
No of words: 504.0 408.028673835 124% => OK
Chars per words: 6.19444444444 5.86048508987 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73813722054 4.48200974243 106% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.394841269841 0.338922669872 116% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.293650793651 0.251872472559 117% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.224206349206 0.174417080927 129% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.176587301587 0.112833075102 157% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94862832748 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.47619047619 0.524397521467 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 55.241198293 59.2087087015 93% => OK
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6684587814 121% => OK
Sentence length: 20.16 20.5533526081 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.107366082 48.84282405 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.88 120.699889404 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.16 20.5533526081 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.48 0.644075263715 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.54480286738 144% => OK
Readability: 49.5250793651 45.7405998639 108% => OK
Elegance: 1.83846153846 1.45489161554 126% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.402901613491 0.300154397459 134% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0944489496679 0.103427244359 91% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0750702202088 0.0752933317313 100% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.467637059085 0.497263757937 94% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.138775185772 0.151897553556 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.152668751783 0.114077575197 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0783413047778 0.0781384742642 100% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.410417400499 0.336927656856 122% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0480788521781 0.067059652881 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.28847207699 0.210909579961 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0926077331201 0.0618886996521 150% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8870967742 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.86379928315 26% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.91756272401 81% => OK
Positive topic words: 16.0 8.42114695341 190% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.4623655914 41% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.75985663082 145% => OK
Total topic words: 21.0 13.6433691756 154% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.