The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Submitted by elirya on Sun, 05/21/2017 - 10:07

These pictures show the changes which took place on an island after the construction of some tourist facilities.

Turning to the first map, it can be seen that an island, which was surrounded by the sea, had few palms and a beach in the west.

Moving to the second map, it is can be clearly seen that some facilities have been constructed. Another interesting point is that there are 15 new tents for tourist to live in. A first block of tents was constructed around the palm trees in the west of the island, whereas the second block of those was built in the central part of it. A footpath was created to walk from the tourist facilities to the beach. Near the tents there are a restaurant and a reception. There is a vehicle track which encircle the reception and anyone who want to sail should follow this track which brings to the pier in the south of the island. In addition, there is a beach for swimming in the west area of the island.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 438, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'restaurants'?
Suggestion: restaurants
... the beach. Near the tents there are a restaurant and a reception. There is a vehicle tra...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 547, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he reception and anyone who want to sail should follow this track which brings to...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, second, so, whereas, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 7.0 186% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 1.00243902439 299% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.15609756098 253% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 9.0 5.60731707317 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 27.0 33.7804878049 80% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 775.0 965.302439024 80% => OK
No of words: 176.0 196.424390244 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.40340909091 4.92477711251 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.64232057368 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36674156824 2.65546596893 89% => OK
Unique words: 96.0 106.607317073 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.545454545455 0.547539520022 100% => OK
syllable_count: 224.1 283.868780488 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.114634146341 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.1662826401 43.030603864 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.1111111111 112.824112599 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5555555556 22.9334400587 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.33333333333 5.23603664747 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171663095327 0.215688989381 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0712255941869 0.103423049105 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0842470652507 0.0843802449381 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158257898659 0.15604864568 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100732328132 0.0819641961636 123% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 13.2329268293 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 77.57 61.2550243902 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.3012195122 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.24 11.4140731707 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.91 8.06136585366 86% => OK
difficult_words: 26.0 40.7170731707 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.0658536585 63% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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