People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Human behavior has puzzled the public and scholars for a long time. When is comes to the determination and motivation of people\'s behavior, the point of views are always ambivalent. Some contend that our behavior is mostly decided by outside forces instead of our own making. I tend to agree with the statement, but I would like to note that under some circumstances, people\'s own making can be chief motivation.
Foremost, sociologists have now understood how our behavior is determined by others. Being aware of it or not, we tend to behave in accordance with a group of people around us, which is known as the reference group. People want to get along well with their partners, and being disparate can make them alienated. Take myself as an example. My family moved to another province when I was in junior middle school, and I later found myself unwittingly altered my speech and expressions in daily life, simply to be similar to my peers, which facilitates the communication between us.
What is more, living in modern society, people are hardly given the latitude to behave according to their own willnesses. Conversly, they have to compete with others, to follow social norms. Many students study hard just because they need to deal with the many exams, to outstrip their counterparts in competition to win the scarce opportunities in society. Similarly, in public space people are restricted by a set of rules and norms. For instance, people are not expected to eat or to make phone calls in the subway, because this behavior can disrupt public orders. People are also required to take the right side when on an elevator or stairs. These social norms can lead to inconvenience personally, even in contradiction to peosonal needs and desire occationlly, but they benefit the public as a whole.
However, as independent individuals, people still can behave following their own motivations, and it is actually one of the hallmarks of modern democracy. This is best illustrated by the thriving civil society. Women and feminists can march for their rights, get themselves heard, for example. Peaceful demonstrations may cause do so. Only by doing so can people\'s freedom to behave be fulfilled. Notbly, as long as well-organized, people\'s behavior of their own making and that of ecternal forces are not mutually exclusive.
Due to aforementioned groud, people tend to behave according to outside forces but not their own making. This is part human nature and part a requisite to live with others in society. But people\'s right to behave by their own motivations freely is still protected and even treasured.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, may, similarly, so, still, well, for example, for instance, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 58.6224719101 113% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2192.0 2235.4752809 98% => OK
No of words: 434.0 442.535393258 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05069124424 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86079371325 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 215.323595506 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539170506912 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 690.3 704.065955056 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.740449438202 270% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.3246070033 60.3974514979 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.68 118.986275619 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.36 23.4991977007 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.24 5.21951772744 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.83258426966 228% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208470144834 0.243740707755 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0588007402924 0.0831039109588 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0369235820474 0.0758088955206 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125296711681 0.150359130593 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0278574990836 0.0667264976115 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 14.1392134831 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.71 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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