The following appeared in a memo from the director of student housing at Buckingham College.
"To serve the housing needs of our students, Buckingham College should build a number of new dormitories. Buckingham's enrollment is growing and, based on current trends, will double over the next 50 years, thus making existing dormitory space inadequate. Moreover, the average rent for an apartment in our town has risen in recent years. Consequently, students will find it increasingly difficult to afford off-campus housing. Finally, attractive new dormitories would make prospective students more likely to enroll at Buckingham."
The director of student housing at Buckingham College appeal for students to build a new number of dormitories, because of in Buckingham’s enrollment is increased, this increasing figure leads to next 50 years present space is inadequate. In addition to, the author, also conclude that attractive dormitories would make prospective students more likely enroll at Buckingham.
In the first argument, that Buckingham’s enrollment is growing and in coming years existing dormitory space will inadequate. First, there is no concrete proof that supports Buckingham’s enrollment double in 50 years. The growing of enrollment at Buckingham is not predictable for future. Furthermore, there is no significant figure for how many enrollments increased in recent years. If it may be true that in next 50 years enrollment will double, but the director also focus on point growing figures of enrollment students will sure enroll for student housing.
Moreover, the director also mention that average rent for an apartment increased, so, as a result of this directors believe that students finding difficulty to afford off-campus housing, consequently, students will enroll at student housing. Again, the director failed to give how much average rent for an apartment increased. If we assume that average rent for an apartment increased, but the director needs to elaborate on off-campus rent and student housing rent. So the director failed to convince claim, therefore, we cannot predict that students will not afford off-campus housing.
The director quickly jumps to the conclusion that attractive dormitories would make students enroll at Buckingham. In general, Students enroll at any college by pointing many aspects like college courses, tuition fees, scholarships, job placement etc. This is true that students also finds their college life will easily complete without any obstacle, so, they also focus on where they leave and get transportation easy. However, the director need to keep in mind that only attractive dormitory would not make students enroll for Buckingham.
In conclusion, it would have been wise for the director to consider all above points and must present concrete examples that are credible. Thus, the argument is weak and the conclusion is unwarranted.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 102, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...apartment increased, so, as a result of this directors believe that students finding...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, thus, in addition, in conclusion, in general, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 58.6224719101 70% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1953.0 2235.4752809 87% => OK
No of words: 350.0 442.535393258 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.58 5.05705443957 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03659449424 2.79657885939 109% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 215.323595506 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.485714285714 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 588.6 704.065955056 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.740449438202 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.7520495657 60.3974514979 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.882352941 118.986275619 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5882352941 23.4991977007 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.52941176471 5.21951772744 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.310541507146 0.243740707755 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121141025095 0.0831039109588 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0983005391414 0.0758088955206 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187764199211 0.150359130593 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.128820300267 0.0667264976115 193% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 14.1392134831 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.8420337079 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.08 12.1639044944 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 100.480337079 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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