Women and men are commonly seen as having different strengths and weaknesses. Is it right to exclude males or females from certain professions because of their gender?
It is undeniably true that men and women have distinct physical and mental characteristics and those features make them appropriate for certain occupations. However, I believe that it is wrong to consider gender as a must-have criterion when recruit employees.
On the one hand, many people allege that males or females should only work in professions that related to the accredited traits of their gender. They argue that men and women have different personalities and only when they choose the jobs suitable for their gender, can they develop and demonstrate all their strengths. While men are said to be rational, strong, determined and likely to join in technical, engineering or business field, women tend to be vulnerable, emotional, benevolent and had better do social work.
However, I believe that it would be unacceptable to preclude anyone from certain professions owing to their gender. It is a fundamental right of human that they can pursue their dream career regardless of their sex. People’s potential aptitude for everything is unlimited; therefore, they are capable of doing jobs that often supposed to be suitable for only male or female and contributing effectively in different aspects to their work. For example, women are the ones who usually do the cooking at home but in reality, the number of famous and respectable male chefs outweighs that of female cooks. Moreover, gender requirement for employment is a means of gender discrimination and dream destruction. That could lead to a major disappointment and hopelessness for qualified people who are rejected just because of their gender.
In conclusion, it seems to me that employees should not discriminate in favour of male or female candidates and make decisions based on job-related skills.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
...ities and only when they choose the jobs suitable for their gender, can they deve...
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Suggestion:
...ur of male or female candidates and make decisions based on job-related skills. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1507.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 283.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32508833922 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04477198112 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.572438162544 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 467.1 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.8060526493 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.583333333 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5833333333 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 7.06120827912 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.318334258411 0.244688304435 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112440017392 0.084324248473 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0460252442239 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171070538887 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0714667337045 0.056905535591 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.07 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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