As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Technological advances bring convenience into the human life which leads to enhanced usage of and dependency upon technology. What is brought up as a question is whether technology leads to improved or deteriorated rumination. The opponents of solving any problem with technology will relate the effects of technology on children to reject the idea that the ability to think has improved as a result of using advanced technology. However, a thorough assessment of the situation substantiates that the merits outweigh the demerits of advanced technology as to the ability of contemplation.
Facing with diverse, complicated, and advanced equipment in everyday life and in professional cases requires the ability to use devices appropriately, which in turn needs human intelligence. The houses, laboratories, factories, and all offices are equipped with a spate of high-tech instruments driven by human. No matter how cutting-edge the devices are, the human-kind employs them. One may decide not to use the devices but he should be wary of the unsatisfactory outcome. But the one who uses the technology contemplates how to get his desired outcome by appropriate employment of every implement. For example, an office staff should be familiar with the operations of a computer, printer, and a copy machine to accomplish his task properly.
Additionally, learning how to set up a device is mind-challenging. Through the process of training and acquiring new knowledge, human is constantly improving his brain’s ability to deliberate. Every new lesson is a prerequisite for the next one or requires some qualification beforehand, thereby recalling the previous knowledge and thinking deeply on the relation of the different subjects together. This is how human organs are stored and kept operational in organ bank by knowing about the engineering of the lab devices and considering biological rules, such as the possible temperature and conditions that can keep the organs sound.
Another important proof that technological advances expand the mind’s ability to ponder is the process of improving and inventing a device. An inventor can only create a new implement if he thinks profoundly on the extant equipment and the human needs. In fact, new inventions are produced to make the life easier and the new ones need more contemplation to be improved. The diversity in productions of motorized vehicle factories is a clear example of new inventions that come true through deep understanding of human needs. The vehicles and machinery can be utilized for people and goods transportation, agriculture, and the like. Even the farm machinery is so diverse in kind with higher efficiency that can illustrate the human initiative in generating new ones to solve problems.
Along with all advantages of technology, it has also damaging effects on human lifestyle and his environment. Sedentary lifestyle that escalated many diseases such as obesity and heart attacks, and global warming and air pollution as a result of fossil fuel consumption are considered as the most important negative impacts of new technologies. Nonetheless, any problem engendered by technological progress can be solved by the technology itself. New and easy to access sporting accessories have made it facile to exercise everywhere. As to the contaminating effects of technology, researchers have found renewable and green resources of energy that can replace fossil fuels. All these solutions are considered as initiatives that require deep thought as well.
All in all if one weighs the advantages and disadvantages of technology on human lifestyle, one soon realizes that any progress in technology leads to a better ability in thinking deeply. As a matter of fact, using scientific knowledge to invent new tools or to improve the ones that exist, utilizing and training to employ the new equipment properly to reach the desired goals and convenient lifestyle and occupation can ameliorate the brain ability to reflect.
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...meliorate the brain ability to reflect.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, nonetheless, so, well, as to, for example, in fact, such as, as a matter of fact, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 31.0 14.8657303371 209% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 86.0 58.6224719101 147% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 12.9106741573 163% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3390.0 2235.4752809 152% => OK
No of words: 624.0 442.535393258 141% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.43269230769 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.99799879888 4.55969084622 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.2124147942 2.79657885939 115% => OK
Unique words: 319.0 215.323595506 148% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511217948718 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 1108.8 704.065955056 157% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.2370786517 138% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.9934258011 60.3974514979 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.071428571 118.986275619 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2857142857 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.35714285714 5.21951772744 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 10.2758426966 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.159770737152 0.243740707755 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0432358425359 0.0831039109588 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0367224795931 0.0758088955206 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0852129955997 0.150359130593 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0365600684036 0.0667264976115 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.22 48.8420337079 66% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.51 12.1639044944 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.66 8.38706741573 115% => OK
difficult_words: 195.0 100.480337079 194% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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