Essay topics: You have been offered a job that will require you to move to a city that you have never visited before. You have a friend who lives there.
Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
1) Explain your situation
2) Say why you feel unsure about living in the city
3) Ask some question about life in the city
Dear John,
I am writing to ask you about a favor.
As you know I have been dreaming about living in a big megalopolis since I was a teenager and now it seems that the dream came true – I have been hired by a computer company whose office is located in Los Angeles. So, I am going to move to LA in the next month.
I will need your help with search of a proper flat because, frankly, my budget is tight and I wanna find cheap apartments near my new workplace. I know that you have a lot of friends in the city and maybe someone may rent me a flat for a reasonable price. Additionally, I hope that you will show me around, you are my only friend in the city and with your help I will quickly adapt to the new environment.
Finally, I have a couple of questions. Firstly, how much money should I have at the beginning? I assume that living in such an enormous city as Los Angeles should be expensive. Secondly, what clothes should I take with me? I will arrive in December, should I have any warm clothes? My mother is going to give me a knitted sweater and a hat but I think that I needn’t have any of those things.
Sincerely yours,
Eugene.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
It is out of topic for the second question: Say why you feel unsure about living in the city.
we need to talk about something generally like: I am quite nervous for moving to the city. for example, i have never lived in such a big city before, blabla...or most people over there own guns, maybe it is not safe...or the rent fee over there is very expensive while my salary is not great enough...
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.5 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 224 250
No. of Characters: 886 1200
No. of Different Words: 130 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.869 4.7
Average Word Length: 3.955 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.263 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 50 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 32 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 16 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 10 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 14.933 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.498 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.533 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.378 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.663 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.198 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, frankly, may, second, secondly, so, i think, you know
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 4.92783505155 203% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.03092783505 198% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 32.9175257732 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 26.0 26.3917525773 99% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 943.0 937.175257732 101% => OK
No of words: 224.0 206.0 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.20982142857 4.54256449028 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.86867284054 3.78020617076 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46279312329 2.54303337028 97% => OK
Unique words: 131.0 127.690721649 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.584821428571 0.622605031667 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 297.9 290.88556701 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.5501755532 44.8134815571 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.5384615385 76.5299724578 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2307692308 16.8248392259 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.38461538462 4.34317383033 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 2.54639175258 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.94845360825 152% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.33323500995 0.216113520407 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0979691399892 0.0766984524023 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.086490451021 0.0603063233224 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18875215402 0.12726935374 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0607923899726 0.0580467560999 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.0 8.37731958763 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 79.6 70.7449484536 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 7.45979381443 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 6.84 8.71597938144 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.95 7.59969072165 91% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 41.2886597938 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 8.62886597938 104% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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