Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?
With no doubt, the good education of students is a universal concern for parents. The question is that whether giving money to the children when they get a high score is a good idea or not. Parents can weigh the pros and cons of each side. In my opinion, if parents sometimes praise their children with money, it will have a good effect on their education.
First, children cannot realize the importance of education in early ages. They really need to be praised for their activities in order to understand that they are doing well. Moreover, it gave them a lot of motivation. For example, I remember myself in elementary school. When my teacher had given me some praise cards or stars, I became so happy. If parents gave money to their children as a prize, they would become so excited, because they do not have any income at that age. Besides, children feel responsible for their money, because they tried hard to achieve it. It is similar to the situation they would have in the future.
Second, it is good to help children feel independent and confidence from the young ages. By giving them money and letting them decide what to do with their money, we would help them grow. For instance, the first time my father decided to give money to my sister, she spent whole money on buying clothes because she was so excited. But after a while, she tried to pay more attention how to spend it. In other words, she learned how to manage her money.
Third, although there are a lot of advantages in giving children prizes, parents should be careful in order not to make children conditional. To make it clear, if parents keep doing this all the time, children would not study in a situation that there is no money. As I mentioned before, it is good that parents do it just sometimes, when children need motivation and stimulus for doing their tasks.
Considering the arguments in favor and against the issue, I mostly believe, if parents try to do it in a right way, there will be a lot of advantages for children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, if, moreover, really, second, so, third, well, while, for example, for instance, no doubt, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1661.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 362.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.58839779006 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41310794506 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505524861878 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 513.0 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.51792114695 284% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.2603742337 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.0952380952 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2380952381 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.71428571429 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.381374785846 0.236089414692 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105914916205 0.076458572812 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0723187120226 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20522878256 0.150856017488 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0806647827271 0.0645574589148 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 11.7677419355 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.05 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.75 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 86.8835125448 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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