Some people feel that success lies in achieving professional and economics targets,while others say that success lies in spending quality time with family and friend?
To what extend do you agree or disagree?
In this day and age,there ia an ongoing debate among people aii around the world about sucsess.While there are certainly valid arguments to claim that cusess lies in gain professional and economic targets,my view is that sucsess is being with family and good friends.In this essay I would discribe both side of arguments.
To begin with there are several reasons why I support sucsees lies in being with family.First and foremost is that if you are more rich and have appropriate social position in society,there would not be any gurantee to be happy.A group of social researchers at Harvard University undertook a study on two groups of different people, the reasult revealed that those who more rich are more depress due to the less free time and large sums of busy mind.The more busy you are,the less happy you would be.
On the other hand,it should be mentioned that happiness is not something except enjoy your time with your family.Although the statistics have shown more ecomic goals play pivotal role in people's happiness ,the lost chain of sucsses lies in being happy.There are many contributing factors for socsess such as ,health and happiness.Economic targets an perfessional accievment not only bring sucsess,but also bring more depression.
To conclude,while there are several compelling arguments on both sides,my personal sentiment is that sucsees and happiness is lies in being with family.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, while, such as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 10.5418719212 199% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 6.10837438424 65% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 8.36945812808 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 5.94088669951 118% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 20.9802955665 91% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 31.9359605911 97% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.75862068966 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1189.0 1207.87684729 98% => OK
No of words: 228.0 242.827586207 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2149122807 5.00649968141 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.88582923847 3.92707691288 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92373500464 2.71678728327 108% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 139.433497537 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.631578947368 0.580463131201 109% => OK
syllable_count: 366.3 379.143842365 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.57093596059 102% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.6157635468 65% => OK
Article: 5.0 1.56157635468 320% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 1.71428571429 175% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.931034482759 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.65517241379 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 12.6551724138 32% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 57.0 20.5024630542 278% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 131.271664879 50.4703680194 260% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 297.25 104.977214359 283% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 57.0 20.9669160288 272% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 18.5 7.25397266985 255% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 20.0 5.33497536946 375% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 6.9802955665 29% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 2.75862068966 36% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 2.91625615764 34% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158040375526 0.242375264174 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102186178314 0.0925447433944 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0245887836653 0.071462118173 34% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102186178314 0.151781067708 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0245887836653 0.0609392437508 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 31.6 12.6369458128 250% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 13.62 53.1260098522 26% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.54236453202 171% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 25.5 10.9458128079 233% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 13.83 11.5310837438 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.62 8.32886699507 128% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 55.0591133005 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 28.5 9.94827586207 286% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 24.8 10.3980295567 239% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 11.0 10.5123152709 105% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 77.7777777778 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 70.0 Out of 90
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