Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours.

Submitted by shayanhgh on Sat, 10/28/2017 - 14:24

Throughout history, in all civilized societies, the issue of employee's work hours engendered copious controversies among people. Some people may hold the view that it is more beneficial to have five days a week job with shorter hours. However, some others may take an opposite viewpoint and believe that it is better to engaged in a three days job with longer hours. As far as I am concerned, work in a five days job with shorter hours has more advantages. In the following paragraph, I will pinpoint the most outstanding reasons.
The first reason worth mentioning is that people can work effectively. Nowadays, the development in the technology happening at a very fast pace and causes competition among companies. Consider an employee who work five days in a momentous company. He can concentrate on his work and finish it without mistake. On the other hand, when a worker work three days a week for longer hours, he consume all his energy and become exhausted which changes his work quality. For example, a person who work long hours become too tired and after that he just wants to finish his job immediately and does not care about the quality. Hence, he makes mistake and fatal in his work and we know that mistake are bad for repetition of the companies and he may get fired or even the company lower his wage. Also, employees after this hours of work, must go back to their families and since they have not any remain energy they can not spend their time with their families and there is a chance that their relationship become worst.
A further more subtle to point out is that people need to enjoy their job in this hectic life. In these time it is very arduous for people to enjoy their life and one solution is to enjoy your work. Perform a job with shorter hours motivate people to enjoy their work. Also, they did not get very tired and this helps them to learn their job accurate and increase their knowledge. In contrary, when a people work long hours he need many days to get recover and after a while he loses his penchant to work again. Moreover, work five days is a good way for employee to make friend with their collauges and they can help each other when they have a problem and need help and this leads to finish their jobs faster.
To make a long story short, based on the aforementioned argument, it is vital for people to work five days in a week. Consequently, it is highly recommended that we make a situation for employees to work in a five days for shorter hours.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 186, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hold the view that it is more beneficial to have five days a week job with shorte...
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Line 2, column 389, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'consumes'.
Suggestion: consumes
... three days a week for longer hours, he consume all his energy and become exhausted whi...
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 810, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...y lower his wage. Also, employees after this hours of work, must go back to their fa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, while, for example, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2048.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 451.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.54101995565 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60833598836 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42693840861 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.458980044346 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 635.4 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.4980725187 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.5238095238 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4761904762 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.90476190476 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.359170326259 0.236089414692 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130202798641 0.076458572812 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0877616967066 0.0737576698707 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.264434788467 0.150856017488 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0534492208381 0.0645574589148 83% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.05 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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