Successful sports stars and glamorous film stars are role models for youngsters. Do you support it or not? (Agree/ disagree)
These days, there is an ongoing debate between people about role modelling the successful celebrities. Although the celebrities become role models for teenagers, my view is that there are a few drawbacks. In this essay, I will explain my point of view by analysing advantages and disadvantages of inspiring celebrities as a role model.
There are several reasons why celebrities cannot inspire as a role model. One of them is that the background and environment are different for every people. It can be argued that everyone can achieve success with a sufficient hard work. It should also be taken into account that talent is one of a key factor for success and different people are talented in different professions.
Those who stood for inspiring celebrities have a different view and said that it will actually be a good thing. Firstly, it is claimed that by having successfully people as role models, teens will have a target on their life. Then, there are concerns about wrong career choices for young people.
There are strong arguments on both sides of the case and my personal opinion is that teenager should not set successful celebrities as their role models. I would strongly recommend that teens must explore their own way of success based on their interest and talent.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 61, Rule ID: PERSONAL_OPINION_FRIENDSHIP[1]
Message: Use simply 'opinion'.
Suggestion: opinion
...uments on both sides of the case and my personal opinion is that teenager should not set success...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, firstly, if, so, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 10.5418719212 142% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 6.10837438424 164% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 8.36945812808 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 5.94088669951 151% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 20.9802955665 119% => OK
Preposition: 18.0 31.9359605911 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 5.75862068966 17% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1078.0 1207.87684729 89% => OK
No of words: 215.0 242.827586207 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01395348837 5.00649968141 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82921379641 3.92707691288 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71296388965 2.71678728327 100% => OK
Unique words: 122.0 139.433497537 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.567441860465 0.580463131201 98% => OK
syllable_count: 335.7 379.143842365 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.57093596059 102% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.6157635468 173% => OK
Article: 0.0 1.56157635468 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.71428571429 58% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.931034482759 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.65517241379 27% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6551724138 95% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.5024630542 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.908358797 50.4703680194 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 89.8333333333 104.977214359 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9166666667 20.9669160288 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.66666666667 7.25397266985 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.33497536946 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 6.9802955665 100% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 2.75862068966 109% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 2.91625615764 69% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160445677798 0.242375264174 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0655644048433 0.0925447433944 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0308881466861 0.071462118173 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0996714716156 0.151781067708 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0355443680527 0.0609392437508 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 12.6369458128 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 53.1260098522 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.54236453202 47% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.9458128079 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 11.5310837438 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.32886699507 98% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 55.0591133005 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.94827586207 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.3980295567 85% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.5123152709 95% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 55.5555555556 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 50.0 Out of 90
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