We can learn more from people at a higher level than us (like teachers) than from people who are at the same level as us.
Throughout the history of humankind, people are curious to know how and why every phenomenon happened. Ordinary, people make a lot of attempts to learn about it, but when they do not understand about, they should use other people know it completely. However, some people suggest that the people learn it from people who have the same knowledge. Choosing between two methods have always some advantages and disadvantages, so I prefer people learn from people at a higher level than us (like teachers) and explain my reasons hereunder.
First and foremost, learning about something needs an authentic source to reach the valuable information, so people have higher level of knowledge than us can be useful. Actually, the people knowing all aspects of one concept can teach every blind spot in each phenomenon and clarify all concepts of it to people from all perspectives. Also, if people require a consult about an issue, sophisticated teachers can give best suggest to them about every problem. For example, in my master project, I had a trouble to choose a decent subject for my mater project, but I found the best professor in my major and consulted with him to find a suitable article. Before I saw him, I had taken advice from my friend, but the professor rejected my friend’s advice and said that I was so lucky that his advice can send me in a misleading way.
Another reason comes to my mind that people have various characteristics, so they need specific method corresponds to their attributes. An expert teacher can teach each person by the special method that they learn high efficiency. On the other hand, the people who are at the same level have one way of teaching like the method that they learned about the subject. Presumably, their method may be not practical for everyone and divert them from the right path to learn. As a result, varied methods are applied in learning, but effective them must be chosen by the high-level person.
All in all, people are seeking an appropriate knowledge about each issue. In this regard, I think people should learn with a sophisticated person who has more knowledge than us, because not only they know all aspects of every issue, but also they use the best way for everyone that relies on one’s attribute.
- "No field of study can advance significantly unless outsiders bring their knowledge andexperience to that field of study." 66
- Should a city try to preserve its old, historic buildings or destroy them and replace them with modern buildings? 83
- People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment- doing things they like to do – rather than doing things they should do. 73
- Some students prefer to study alone. Others prefer to study with a group of students. Which do you prefer? 60
- Some people prefer to work for a large company. Others prefer to work for a small company. Which would you prefer? 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 360, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...l perspectives. Also, if people require a consult about an issue, sophisticated teachers ...
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Line 2, column 815, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a misleading way" with adverb for "misleading"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...as so lucky that his advice can send me in a misleading way. Another reason comes to my mind that ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, may, so, then, for example, i think, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1887.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 388.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86340206186 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65293584629 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.512886597938 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 585.9 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.6691663963 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.9375 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.25 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.386731920205 0.236089414692 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.135536884228 0.076458572812 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.119666316143 0.0737576698707 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.246695459343 0.150856017488 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10583721613 0.0645574589148 164% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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