Some people believe that success in life comes from taking risks or chances. Others believe that success results from careful planning. In your opinion, where does success come from? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
A glance at successful people life often brings a light question that has several times provoked discussion, that is whether success in life comes from taking risk or if careful planning make it possible. Some people might contend that taking risks is crucial and only key. However, I would say it is the careful planning that leads to success. In ensuing paragraph, I will try to shed some light on this point of view through ample examples and conspicuous reasons.
The exquisite point to be mentioned first is that planning is crucial to climb every rung of the ladder to success. What happens is when we plan stuff, we think everything through, we analyse every situation and consider every possibility. My personal experience will provide some good demonstration. When i was in A level it was my ambition to get straight A*. That is something that only brilliant students get. Being an average student that seemed impossible. To get what I wanted I not only went through the experiences of such students but I also did good research on the best books. After making a proper schedule, I followed it diligently. The end result was simply marvelous. Straight A*! No sooner had my result came that I started getting interviews calls. Not only from places where i have applied but also from places which were yet to be applied!
On the other hand, my twin sister who was a brilliant student and love taking chances. She did not make a proper plan or look out for best book. Nor did she understood the grave nature of the issue. She got average score and could not get into the college of her choice. That was really heart breaking for her.
Due to foregoing ground, I firmly believe that risk taking could be thrilling but to be successful a person needs to plan everything beforehand. Is it not better to plan everything instead of regretting?
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: I
...l provide some good demonstration. When i was in A level it was my ambition to ge...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... plan everything instead of regretting?
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, really, so, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1525.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 323.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7213622291 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5700510724 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.566563467492 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 461.7 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.0592638056 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.619047619 100.406767564 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.380952381 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.14285714286 5.45110844103 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212303119375 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0485039197628 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0770125032979 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129342737348 0.150856017488 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103356916198 0.0645574589148 160% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.5 11.7677419355 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.5 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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