young people today do not have influence on the important decision for society.
Even though young people are always the future for the societies or nations, the ongoing debate exists as to whether young people today do not have influence on the important decision for society. As far as I am concerned, it is fewer influence on the society that young people have exerted today.
To begin with, It is unnecessary for the youth to have influence on the society. For example, it is said in history books that increasing numbers of young people in China devoted their lives and all passions to the revolution in the early 19th century. However, our society has become increasingly stable and prosper in past decade, so it is no longer that young people should stand out to fight for the independent or democracy for the nation. And the most young students today put more emphasis on their own study or future careers rather than some decision for the nation, because those things they care about are much more critical in their future.
Furthermore, the youth is not suitable of making any important decisions for the society. The main reason is that the most youths are not experienced or competent enough to be the center of administration or make some decision on many aspects in the society. Jane, the president in student union of our university, may be a case to this point. Last year, Jane purposed that there should be a café shop in the first floor of library, because she believed that it would be convenient for student to refresh themselves. However, there is a no room for the café shop in the first floor of library, so if the café shop open here, it could replace the resting place in the first floor. And some students started to blame Jane that she always purposed what she wanted to do and never considered the condition of library because she had just come to library for one time. Finally, Jane's plan was rejected by the school.
Admittedly, the youth should have more opportunities to participate in the decision of community, because they are the future for the societies or nations. However, it is not doubting that young people today have fewer influence on the society, because of the stable development of society. Therefore, if the youth wants to be in the center of authority, they have to foster their ability or increase their experience of being leader in schools or small communities.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 105, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...s or nations, the ongoing debate exists as to whether young people today do not have influenc...
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Line 4, column 168, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...r the societies or nations. However, it is not doubting that young people today have fewer infl...
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Line 4, column 301, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...table development of society. Therefore, if the youth wants to be in the center o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, therefore, as to, for example, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1935.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 406.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76600985222 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5465467094 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.475369458128 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 615.6 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 47.5971046914 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.9375 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.375 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.9375 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.482046896063 0.236089414692 204% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.171085564104 0.076458572812 224% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.173633196833 0.0737576698707 235% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.353228737525 0.150856017488 234% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.192902836013 0.0645574589148 299% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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