Some people think that hobbies should be linked with technology, while others believe that it is not necessary for hobbies to be involved with technology. Discuss, what is your opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your experience.
It is often argued that, hobbies should be connected with innovative technical works, whereas, many believes that passion for certain things are carried out by personally and no need to link with engineering. However, irrespective of technical connection, hobbies are always part of themselves with self satisfaction and purity, and above that which would be dangerous in some point of view. Nevertheless, in my opinion, linking hobbies to technology would enhance the power and value of hobbies and somehow increase market value.
On the one hand, people who oppose to the technical link on hobbies because, being reality and chastity of hobbies seem to be constant and get cherish in ones own heart such as, artificial intelligence might be corrupt the exact value of hobbies what we actually mean. For instance, hobbies like drawing and painting when we make over with technology which would be diminish the exact talent of an artist who considered it as his hobby than job. Moreover, interaction with technology would have detrimental effect on children like who interested to watching films or cartoons may addicted to info surfing for new updates of films which may lead to dangerous site visits. For example, recently, many students were engaged to part of dangerous blue whale game.
On the other hand, hobbies would make as a marketing or money making strategy by the help of ingenious development of technology. Many people dispute to the fact that, various technical supporters by online or by internet technology to enhance the hobbies as a trading wile to become rich and famous in the society. For example, one of the celebrity film actress in Hollywood started online dress designing and selling as part of her hobby makes up her status in society somehow more than her donation in film industry. Furthermore, by the virtue of technical advances, many writers and artists could express their talent to society through social media like hobbies like dubsmash, poems, or articles and so on.
To sum up, in my perspective, people who wish to inter connect hobbies with technology would have plethora of benefits in terms of financially, and for publicity if the usage of technology is reliable and safe to handle without corruption.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, whereas, for example, for instance, such as, in my opinion, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 41.998997996 162% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1886.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 368.0 315.596192385 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.125 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70810914685 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565217391304 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 592.2 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.2975951904 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 47.7675941989 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 157.166666667 106.682146367 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.6666666667 20.7667163134 148% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.0833333333 7.06120827912 185% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.271457002821 0.244688304435 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104005936887 0.084324248473 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0580985928633 0.0667982634062 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169179573102 0.151304729494 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0663976140366 0.056905535591 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 13.0946893788 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 50.2224549098 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.07 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.33 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.1190380762 138% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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