In any field of inquiry, the beginner is more likely than the expert to make important contributions.
In retrospect, we have realized that pace of human development would not have been so rapid if there were not hard work of scientists, politicians, artists and so forth. At every moment, people are contributing for the welfare of human race and hence for themselves. Now, here comes the question: does the contribution of neophyte outweigh the contribution of the expert to respective field? I agree with the author. History is replete with the example that novice has contributed far more than the expert did.
First, it is not always the expertise and experiences that lead to important discovery; rather, it is new and creative idea that triggers revolution in particular field. For example, A Norwegian mathematician Niels Henrick Able was the first mathematician to demonstrate that general quintic equation under radical is unsolvable. Which was the problem that has been baffling mathematician for years; even though Able was novice Mathematician, his contribution to the field of mathematics is incredible.
Secondly, Albert Einstein – a revolutionary scientist- was born in Germany. He spent his early life working outside of academia. He was not known as a scientist until he published his most important paper ‘the theory of general relativity’ which eventually came to be the foundation of modern physics. So, his contribution as a novice scientist is far-reaching.
Finally, Mrk Zuckerberg- a business magnet of the silicon valley- has revolutionized the information and technology by establishing a social network Facebook. Because of the Zuckerberg’s initiative, people around the world have now more access to communication than ever before. Mr. Zuckerberg was still a college student when he set up Facebook.
Admittedly, some may argue that it would be unjust for millions of experts if we attributed important contributions to only novices, but I think no one would refute the fact that most of the striking contributions are made by novices rather than experts.
By way of conclusion, even though we cannot underestimate the contributions of the experts, most of the important contribution are made by novices.
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- Claim: The best way to understand the character of a society is to examine the character of the men and women that the society chooses as its heroes or its role models.Reason: Heroes and role models reveal a society's highest ideals. 66
- Although many people think that the luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life are entirely harmless they in fact prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals 92
- A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college. 50
- In any field of inquiry, the beginner is more likely than the expert to make important contributions. 66
- In any field of endeavor, it is impossible to make a significant contribution without first being strongly influenced by past achievements within that field. 50
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, for example, i think, in particular
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 58.6224719101 67% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1834.0 2235.4752809 82% => OK
No of words: 337.0 442.535393258 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.44213649852 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.32158967024 2.79657885939 119% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 215.323595506 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.596439169139 0.4932671777 121% => OK
syllable_count: 573.3 704.065955056 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 57.456347203 60.3974514979 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.882352941 118.986275619 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8235294118 23.4991977007 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.94117647059 5.21951772744 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.11370524012 0.243740707755 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0357588641397 0.0831039109588 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0467761039796 0.0758088955206 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0570316608295 0.150359130593 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0263706972277 0.0667264976115 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.27 12.1639044944 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.31 8.38706741573 111% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 100.480337079 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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