Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In modern age, social media such as television, internet, social network, newspaper and many other similar items and containers have crucial role in humans' life. One of the most important part of social programs' is commercial. Whether commercials show real accept of particle or not is controversial. According what I generally believe, advertisements don’t exhibit all part of goods like beneficial and drawback aspect. The following paragraphs by containing the main reasons, will substantiate my viewpoint.
The main reasons why I believe that commercial make exaggerate about product is because they want improve sale of things. To elaborate on my points, since some companies attain high beneficial, they use unreal commercials. Therefore, they can introduce product in better ways so that most people attract to buy goods. In the other words, most factories try make commercial which special show only the positive aspect of product, so some consumer cannot trust to the advertisement. If some ads exhibit both merits and demerits, merchant not only being trust to the company but also being try to buy another goods. A significant example that strikes my mind is my own experience. Last week, when I was washing the dishes, the television shown special ads about some beauty cream. This advertisement was so attract for me; because, they only exhibit positive facet of things. After I bought this product, I really understood this cream did not have high quality as ads was shown. As result I strongly decided never ever obtain this cream.
In addition, in my opinion most ads only bold benefits side of goods and they use famous person for better introduce artifact. Inasmuch as well-known persons are really popular between humans, some advertisement are used this person. Prominence people who play role in ads bring about most merchants only see noteworthy side and apathetic fallacious dimension. A quite clear example would be ads about shampoo Company. They are use person who is one of very famous actor; thus, most people want to buy product which shown famous people used this shampoo. In conversely, merchant understand these shampoo do not have as much as remarkable side and advertisements are overstated and tell lay; then, people decide don't endorse this shampoo and actors who play in commercial.
To conclude, I generally hold the opinion that most commercial try to show only positive aspect. Because of they need high beneficial. Also they are using famous people to attract more consumers.
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- Do you agree or disagree? People meet many problems in their daily life and they can solve them by themselves or with the help of their families, so the help from the government is not necessary. 66
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, if, really, so, then, therefore, thus, well, in addition, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2129.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 406.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24384236453 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73997591756 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544334975369 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 661.5 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.7811504428 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.7083333333 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9166666667 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.29166666667 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177033180254 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0499911324111 0.076458572812 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0379690082766 0.0737576698707 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100350021127 0.150856017488 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0415118498769 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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