TOEFL TPO 17 - Integrated Writing Task
The article states that continually increasing human population and agriculture and pesticide result in necessarily decline the number of birds in the United States and issues three reason of support. In contrast, the professor makes clear that decline in birds number have a another reason and is not depend on the steady growth of the human population and renounce each of author's reasons.
First, the reading claims that destroy the habitat of birds is due to construction new homes, infrastructural likes road, bridge, so on. Conversely, the professor refutes this point by imparting that increase in extend and construction of city cause increase in birds population such as Pigeon and Crow population. He asserts that decline in some of population may be result in increase in many another birds population.
In addition , the passage posits that the decline in bird populations in rural areas is due to converted wilderness area to agricultural use ground. However, the speaker says that more crops along with more agriculture extend, there is a more feed to birds. According to professor author's reason is unconvinced.
Finally, the text contends that more critically factor in decline of birds is the use of chemical pesticides. On the contrary, the lecturer opposes this point by expressing that with advanced technology and use of genetics in agriculture, scientist produce and introduce pesticide-resistant crops and it is not harmful for birds.
We also learn that study and use of agriculture new technology and science make clear way to farmers to conserve environment.
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement All university students should be required to take history courses no matter what their field of study is Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 76
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Leadership comes naturally one cannot learn to be a leader Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 71
- Asteroids are large space objects made of rock and ice There are hundreds of thousands of asteroids in our solar system Though we often hear ideas about establishing colonies of humans to live and work on our Moon or our neighboring planet Mars some think 78
- Glass is a favored building material for modern architecture yet it is also very dangerous for wild birds Because they often cannot distinguish between glass and open air millions of birds are harmed every year when they try to fly through glass windows T 76
- Agnostids were a group of marine animals that became extinct about 450 million years ago Agnostid fossils can be found in rocks in many areas around the world From the fossil remains we know that agnostids were primitive arthropods relatives of modern day 80
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 275, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...clear that decline in birds number have a another reason and is not depend on the...
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Line 1, column 303, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'depended'.
Suggestion: depended
...number have a another reason and is not depend on the steady growth of the human popul...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 404, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'birds'' or 'bird's'?
Suggestion: birds'; bird's
...y be result in increase in many another birds population. In addition , the passag...
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Line 5, column 12, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...another birds population. In addition , the passage posits that the decline in ...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, conversely, finally, first, however, may, so, in addition, in contrast, such as, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.4613686534 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 7.30242825607 164% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 22.412803532 67% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 30.3222958057 129% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 5.01324503311 219% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1344.0 1373.03311258 98% => OK
No of words: 252.0 270.72406181 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33333333333 5.08290768461 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98428260373 4.04702891845 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01990252766 2.5805825403 117% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 145.348785872 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.539682539683 0.540411800872 100% => OK
syllable_count: 423.9 419.366225166 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.397911172 49.2860985944 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.181818182 110.228320801 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9090909091 21.698381199 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.27272727273 7.06452816374 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.423582200858 0.272083759551 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.15019258539 0.0996497079465 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0859602870433 0.0662205650399 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209414085425 0.162205337803 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0823204610081 0.0443174109184 186% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.3589403974 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 53.8541721854 76% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 5.55761589404 202% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.0289183223 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 12.2367328918 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.42419426049 107% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 63.6247240618 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.7273730684 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.