Scandals are useful because they focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.
Scandals have become the headlines with the morning tea for a common man in any country in the world. Sex scandal that are a part of daily news paper and any news channel, raid in the house of any minister or government officials and other government level scams like scams involving 2g spectrum are some of the minor scandals that have become common discussion topics in our day-to-day lives. But to learn something, it is not necessary that we start supporting these scandals. It is incorrect to understand every danger after its being conducted and learn from that despite of learning prior to that scandal from a speaker or reformer and learning from it.
One morning I was travelling from my home to my college and I heard the news of a girl, who was raped in a moving bus by a group of men that even included a juvenile. The girl then dies in the hospital a week later because of all the injuries and the trauma she went through. There were new rules created after that. The cars and busses were not allowed to have nay more tinted glasses. There was constant checking on the roads by the police officials and huge security in public places like malls and cinemas. The corporate offices discouraged women to opt for night shifts and sty alone in the offices. Any FIR complaint lodged in the police station was taken very seriously. This all happened after the life of an individual was lost and the pain that someone else went through to get this rule stronger. One could have prevented this initially and no harm could have happened if strict measures would have been taken before hand.
There is no need for scandals to happen and a life to be ruined for a refutation to take place. A good change can take place in spite of any scandal and any loss related to that scandal. There have been other money scandals where the ministers have had money hidden in their houses and they were furtive whenever someone called up that topic in media. These Ministers later faced income tax raids and millions of dollars were recovered. Some scandals are so silly that they occurred. Years Age in New Delhi, India, an upcoming model and a bar tender was shot in head by the son of a state cabinet minister because she refused to serve him a drink in a club after the closing hour of the club. The girl's family especially her sister fought for 10 years in the court of law for her justice. The entire nation came together after 10 years to support the girl and get the son of the minister behind bars. But again, this incident not only took a life but also took a toll of years from a family.
One should learn from scandals and not repeat the incident again. There are speakers and reformers who help the world in creating awareness. But precaution should be taken that scandals should not take place again ever. They are not meant for learning. Lets not make a learning chapter in our life.
- Mena nd women are physically different 50
- You have enough money to purchase either a house or a business. Which would you choose to buy? Give specific reasons to explain your choice. 60
- Scandals are useful because they focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could. 58
- Do you agree with the following statement? Good teachers are more important to a child's development than good parents. Use specific details to support your argument. 60
- You have enough money to purchase either a house or a business. Which would you choose to buy? Give specific reasons to explain your choice. 66
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 140, Rule ID: NEWS_PAPER[1]
Message: Did you mean 'newspaper'? This word sequence is usually spelled together.
Suggestion: newspaper
...d. Sex scandal that are a part of daily news paper and any news channel, raid in the house...
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Line 1, column 301, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...ms like scams involving 2g spectrum are some of the minor scandals that have become common ...
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Line 3, column 900, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had been'?
Suggestion: had been
... could have happened if strict measures would have been taken before hand. There is no need...
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Line 3, column 922, Rule ID: BEFORE_HAND[1]
Message: Did you mean 'beforehand'?
Suggestion: beforehand
...f strict measures would have been taken before hand. There is no need for scandals to h...
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Line 5, column 698, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'girls'' or 'girl's'?
Suggestion: girls'; girl's
...after the closing hour of the club. The girls family especially her sister fought for...
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Line 7, column 254, Rule ID: LETS_LET[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
... ever. They are not meant for learning. Lets not make a learning chapter in our life...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, then, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 14.8657303371 175% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 58.6224719101 121% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2372.0 2235.4752809 106% => OK
No of words: 524.0 442.535393258 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.52671755725 5.05705443957 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7844588288 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.24840586717 2.79657885939 80% => OK
Unique words: 275.0 215.323595506 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524809160305 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 749.7 704.065955056 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 55.515121088 60.3974514979 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.8518518519 118.986275619 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4074074074 23.4991977007 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.33333333333 5.21951772744 26% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 17.0 5.13820224719 331% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149780554132 0.243740707755 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0385330102927 0.0831039109588 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0396035441654 0.0758088955206 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0979699672383 0.150359130593 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0431033675346 0.0667264976115 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 14.1392134831 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 48.8420337079 141% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 12.1743820225 68% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.99 12.1639044944 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.47 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 100.480337079 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.