according to recent report from our marketing department,during the past year,fewer people attended the Super Screen produced movies than in any other year .Also says that yet the percentage of positive reviews by the movie reviewers about specific Super screen movies actually increased during the past years.And conclude that the contents of these reviewers are not reaching enough of our prospective viewers. And sya that the problem lies not with the quality of our movies but with the public lack of awareness that movies of good quality are avilabale.Super screen should therfore alloctae a greater share of its budget next year to reaching the public through advertising.
The argument says that according to recent report from our marketing department,during the past year,fewer people attended the Super Screen produced movies than in any other year .Also says that yet the percentage of positive reviews by the movie reviewers about specific Super screen movies actually increased during the past years.And conclude that the contents of these reviewers are not reaching enough of our prospective viewers. And sya that the problem lies not with the quality of our movies but with the public lack of awareness that movies of good quality are avilabale.Super screen should therfore alloctae a greater share of its budget next year to reaching the public through advertising.There are many flaws in the argument above.
First.The writer says that recent report form our marketing department,during the past years,fewer people attended super screen produced movies than in any other year.But the writer must provide more data about wwhich year they are comparing,the people attended the Super screen produced movies and the number of the super movies at that time.It is also possible that the super produced movies have decrease than the previous year.So the without the data of the number of people and movies produces we cannot say anything.
Secondly,the writer says thet the problem lies not with the quality of our movies but with the public lack of awareness that movies of good quality are avilabale.The flaw in the statement is that if the public awareness about the movies of the good quality are decrease than how the number of reviwers increase than the past years.It show that the people are aware of the quality of the movie.The other flaw is that the writer cioncludes that the problem is with the public awreness not o the quality but the rewiers are increase and it may be possible that the movies are not of the good quality so that the people are less attending the movies produced and they are complaing about the quality of the movies by giving the more reviews.
Thirdly,the writer says that theSuper screen should therfore alloctae a greater share of its budget next year to reaching the public through advertising.The flaw in the statement is that if the viewers attending the super screen movies has been decrease than the past year so, that to investe more budget next years to reaching the public through advertising will be not work rather than they should focus on betterment of the quality of the movies so that more people attend to watch the movies and should increase the quality of the conteds so that people can understand the motive of the movie.
At the end i says that the writer must answer the about question about the nuimber of the peoples attending the super produced movies ,the number of the super screen movies about data of the past years.
- AS people rely more and more on technology to solve problems.the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate. 50
- according to recent report from our marketing department,during the past year,fewer people attended the Super Screen produced movies than in any other year .Also says that yet the percentage of positive reviews by the movie reviewers about specific Super 43
- Other people claim that in order to be successful, a leader must be willing and able to cooperate with others. 50
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 9 15
No. of Words: 491 350
No. of Characters: 2307 1500
No. of Different Words: 154 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.707 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.699 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.156 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 174 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 99 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 68 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 28 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 54.556 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 29.59 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.778 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.533 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.756 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.198 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...re aware of the quality of the movie.The other flaw is that the writer cioncludes...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 13.6137724551 154% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 28.8173652695 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 55.5748502994 126% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2350.0 2260.96107784 104% => OK
No of words: 473.0 441.139720559 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96828752643 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66353547975 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54472396503 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 204.123752495 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.338266384778 0.468620217663 72% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 714.6 705.55239521 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 19.7664670659 30% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 78.0 22.8473053892 341% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 178.035264921 57.8364921388 308% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 391.666666667 119.503703932 328% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 78.8333333333 23.324526521 338% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 12.1666666667 5.70786347227 213% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 30.0 5.25449101796 571% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 6.88822355289 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.556056240217 0.218282227539 255% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.360114046885 0.0743258471296 485% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.244755102004 0.0701772020484 349% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.374228657981 0.128457276422 291% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.181710575684 0.0628817314937 289% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 41.4 14.3799401198 288% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 0.77 48.3550499002 2% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 32.5 12.197005988 266% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.73 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.91 8.32208582834 119% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 98.500998004 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 27.0 12.3882235529 218% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 33.2 11.1389221557 298% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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