The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Essay topics:

The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pie charts given illustrates the online sales among four retail sectors (electronics and appliance, food and beverage, home furniture, and video games) in Canada during 2005 and 2010. The units are in percentage.

Overall, from the two pie charts it is clearly evident that in five years there is massive growth of about 10% in online sale of food and beverage retailers and only 5% growth in video games and electronics & appliance market. whereas, online home furniture market has strunk by 10 %.

In 2005 food and beverage industry had rose online sales from 22% to 32% in 2010. Similarly video games and electronics & appliance market had also increased by 5% from 18% and 30% to 23% and 35% respectively in between the years 2005 to 2010. However, the only industry to perform bad in those years was home furniture, which lost 10% from 25% in 2005 to 15% in 2010.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 73, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sectors'' or 'sector's'?
Suggestion: sectors'; sector's
...ates the online sales among four retail sectors electronics and appliance, food and bev...
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Line 3, column 228, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Whereas
...mes and electronics & appliance market. whereas, online home furniture market has strun...
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Line 3, column 228, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...mes and electronics & appliance market. whereas, online home furniture market has strun...
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Line 5, column 83, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Similarly,
...e online sales from 22% to 32% in 2010. Similarly video games and electronics & appliance...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, similarly, so, whereas

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 6.8 162% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 33.7804878049 83% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 726.0 965.302439024 75% => OK
No of words: 152.0 196.424390244 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77631578947 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.51124308557 3.73543355544 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47052131064 2.65546596893 93% => OK
Unique words: 84.0 106.607317073 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.552631578947 0.547539520022 101% => OK
syllable_count: 213.3 283.868780488 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.1367778403 43.030603864 156% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.714285714 112.824112599 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7142857143 22.9334400587 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.28571428571 5.23603664747 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208673666865 0.215688989381 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0980015505221 0.103423049105 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0851772591803 0.0843802449381 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165684490775 0.15604864568 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0664438431013 0.0819641961636 81% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.2329268293 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 61.2550243902 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.3012195122 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 11.4140731707 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.06136585366 95% => OK
difficult_words: 29.0 40.7170731707 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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