Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork, which of the two approaches do you prefer
Modern parents have little time to socialize with their children as a consequence of their busy schedule thus it is crucial to use it effectively. In my opinion, I completely agree with the idea that these precious hours should be used for playing games or sports with their kids. There are two reasons supporting my view which will be explored in the following essay.
First of all, playing with their kids greatly contributes to the consolidation of family relationships. In the current competitive society, adults experience incessantly stressful hours at their office while younger ones are exhausted with school activities and a range of extra classes. It means that they have little time left during the day to meet each other. As the result, playing sports and games during spare time greatly attributes to an exciting environment at home. My own experience exemplifies this idea. My son is usually worn out after eight hours at school with a lot of schoolwork. Therefore, we always play football or go swimming together on weekends which help us ready for the following busy week. Not only that, outdoor activities bring my family closer together as we understand how much we cherish each other.
Secondly, participating in a variety of physical activities is pivotal in maintaining the welfare of children. Breathing fresh air and burning energy through these exercises have been proved to nip in the bud various issues caused by sitting for hours carrying out mentally related tasks. Besides, a meager and weak graduate is likely to encounter a lot of baffles in his future career regardless of his talent and intelligence. My cousin is a paradigm for this statement. As his parents worked far from home and used to come back home late, he spent most hours during the day either studying or watching television without engaging in any outdoor exercises. As a consequent of years of unhealthy life style, my cousin is not strong enough to cope with stressful life despite his excellent academic results.
In conclusion, I understand why some people prefer spending their free time helping their sons and daughters to finish school tasks, but my view is that doing physical activities together is more advantageous. This is because it brings about strong welfare for adolescents and because it also strengthens connections among family members.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, while, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1978.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 386.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12435233161 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77152675856 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.598445595855 0.524837075471 114% => OK
syllable_count: 606.6 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.1978721339 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.105263158 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3157894737 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.57894736842 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247854143408 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0673669107508 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0763676771569 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152383527311 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.061826258482 0.0645574589148 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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