The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010.

Essay topics:

The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010.

​These pie charts given information about the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2015 and 2010. The data presents in percentage. Overall, it can be seen that food and beverage increased while home furnishing experienced decrease.
​In the one hand in 2005, electronic and appliance got 35% which the biggest category. Followed by food and beverage which was 22% was the second biggest. Than it was followed by video and games which stood at 18% was the third biggest. However, the most smallest was home furnishing which noted at 25%.
​On the other hand in 2010, food and beverage’s percentage of online shopping sales increased which was standing at 10% while video games grew which stood at 5% of online shopping sales. However, the percentage of sales of electronic and appliance and home furnishing decreased during the same period. Home furnishing dropped which noted at 10% whilst electronics and appliance’s percentage declined which market at 5%.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 155, Rule ID: SENT_START_THEM[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Then'?
Suggestion: Then
...e which was 22% was the second biggest. Than it was followed by video and games whic...
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Line 2, column 250, Rule ID: MOST_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use only 'smallest' (without 'most') when you use the superlative.
Suggestion: smallest
...18% was the third biggest. However, the most smallest was home furnishing which noted at 25%....
^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, second, third, while, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 3.15609756098 285% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 33.7804878049 62% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 834.0 965.302439024 86% => OK
No of words: 159.0 196.424390244 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24528301887 4.92477711251 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.55098862472 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77601542132 2.65546596893 105% => OK
Unique words: 86.0 106.607317073 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.540880503145 0.547539520022 99% => OK
syllable_count: 242.1 283.868780488 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 3.36585365854 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.4926829268 67% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.1277278731 43.030603864 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.4 112.824112599 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.9 22.9334400587 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.8 5.23603664747 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173146851046 0.215688989381 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0779790591971 0.103423049105 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.158252011482 0.0843802449381 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152051906162 0.15604864568 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.135091370866 0.0819641961636 165% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.2329268293 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 61.2550243902 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.3012195122 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.87 11.4140731707 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.06136585366 100% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 40.7170731707 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 11.4329268293 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.9970731707 73% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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