You have seen an advertisement in an English newspaper for a job working in the City Museum shop during the holidays. You decide to apply for the job.
Write a letter to the director of the Museum. In your letter,
• introduce yourself
• explain what experience and special skills you have
• explain why you are interested in the job
Dear Sir,
My name is Vishal Bhat, I am a student of art at York University in Canada, I am writing this letter with regards to the notice I saw in BBC newspaper about work opportunity in your Museum shop for this coming month July.
I have worked for the London museum for 2 years as a desk representative in the past. I have complete knowledge of exhibition management. I was also arranging client meetings with the owners, plus records of visitors on a daily basis. In addition to that, I have been awarded the best employee of the month 4 times during my job in the museum.
My education is almost similar to this profession, this job will help me to gain some more experience on a professional scale. Besides, it will also support me financially to aid my studies and other expenses. During holidays I do not have any commitment, thus this opportunity will make me to utilized my time also.
I look forward to hearing from you.
Yours sincerely,
Vishal Bhat
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 10, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Sir, My name is Vishal Bhat, I am a student o...
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Line 5, column 139, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ete knowledge of exhibition management. I was also arranging client meetings with...
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Line 7, column 312, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...tunity will make me to utilized my time also. I look forward to hearing from you...
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Line 11, column 17, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...to hearing from you. Yours sincerely, Vishal Bhat
^^^
Line 12, column 12, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...m you. Yours sincerely, Vishal Bhat
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, look, so, thus, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 5.05154639175 20% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 32.9175257732 82% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 26.3917525773 99% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 808.0 937.175257732 86% => OK
No of words: 174.0 206.0 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.64367816092 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.63192868298 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72862039672 2.54303337028 107% => OK
Unique words: 115.0 127.690721649 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.66091954023 0.622605031667 106% => OK
syllable_count: 256.5 290.88556701 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.13402061856 131% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.5701358645 44.8134815571 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.8 76.5299724578 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4 16.8248392259 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.2 4.34317383033 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210260854757 0.216113520407 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0754658427917 0.0766984524023 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0685082331975 0.0603063233224 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116737281043 0.12726935374 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0596786369945 0.0580467560999 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 8.37731958763 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 70.7449484536 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 7.45979381443 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 8.71597938144 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 7.59969072165 110% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 41.2886597938 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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