Some parents buy their children a large number of toy to play with.
What are the advantages and disadvantages for the child of having a large number of toys ?
Some parents believe that buying a large number of toys for their children is important while others think that it has some drawbacks. In this essay, both ideas will be examined.
First of all, there are several advantages for children to have many toys. One clear reason is children can improve their thinking skills since most of toys designed for children to use their imagination while playing like puppets or robots. Furthermore, children can develop the concentration’s level while they focus on toys. For example, in puzzle game, they have to solve the problems to find the way out in that game. Lastly, children will likely to play toys that parents brought for them instead of going to play dangerous activities outside the house with friends. As a result, they will easily be on the parent’s sight.
On the other hand, buying too much toys for children has some negative aspects. Firstly, how children will focus on daily routines might become decreased or it can also be called as toys addicted. For instance, if it is a time to take shower, kids might not want to go since they are still happy with their plays. In addition, children can be spoiled too much by their parents. However, if one day parents cannot support them a new toy, they will feel regret and, moreover, they might judge that parents don’t love them like before.
In conclusion, even though giving children a large number of toys has numerous benefits, from my point of view, parents have to limit this behavior or buying them some toys in only special occasions. If children familiar with having many toys throughout their life, some day they won’t get enough.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 34, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
Some parents believe that buying a large number of toys for their children is important wh...
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Line 3, column 145, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the toys') or simply say ''most toys''.
Suggestion: most of the toys; most toys
...can improve their thinking skills since most of toys designed for children to use their imag...
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Line 5, column 31, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...ight. On the other hand, buying too much toys for children has some negative asp...
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Line 7, column 44, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...conclusion, even though giving children a large number of toys has numerous benefits, from my poi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, lastly, moreover, so, still, while, as to, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1390.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 283.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91166077739 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49495989593 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.56183745583 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 409.5 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.0500483933 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.6666666667 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8666666667 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.6666666667 7.06120827912 179% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.443469223175 0.244688304435 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.151167148869 0.084324248473 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.124971523591 0.0667982634062 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.310114151636 0.151304729494 205% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0815151331855 0.056905535591 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.0946893788 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 50.2224549098 140% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 11.3001002004 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.58950901804 87% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 78.4519038076 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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