Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim AND the reason on which that claim is based.
Countless great people have encouraged the young people to dream, to be ambitious and to follow their heart. While it all sounds theoretically good but in order to realise his or her potential, the person has to look beyond the quixotic superficial meaning of this statement. It is not the dream but the goal that needs to be pursued and it is the greater good of the goal that should drive the person in order to bring a change in this world. Therefore, I agree with the claim that the emphasis needs to be on picking worthy goal.
Freud had once said that dreams often bring out suppressed emotions and as Man is considered as a rational animal, that is, he performs a set of actions that benefits his own well-being, it is quite natural that our suppressed emotions tend to be selfish. In some cases, they can be borderline vindictive when a person is indignant about the world and the injustice in it. A goal borne out of envy and acrimony can hardly be considered prudent and tactful. In such cases, one cannot simply give in to the impulses and follow the dreams. He must persevere to make this world a better place by creating a difference in the right way - a way that is fair to other people. So in other words, he must focus on building and targeting a goal that is worthy. A worthy goal might be exceptionally difficult to create and even more difficult to follow. When the situations become adversarial, it becomes even more difficult to do the right thing, to work hard and to not give up. And this is where the challenge of the hour needs to be - pursue those worthy goals and substantiate the efforts made in the right direction.
As humans, we often tend to be capricious and impulsive and accordingly. our mood, thoughts and dreams reflect our mercurial mindset. In order to achieve great things, our actions should be based on a solid foundation of self-belief and the answer to the question "why". This answer helps to drive us in the difficult circumstances. This answer needs to be secure enough to support our plan of actions. An answer arising out of selfishness and whimsical nature cannot be strong or firm enough to drive us in good or bad times. We need this answer to come from the proper amalgamation of logic, emotion and virtue. Only then will we be able to convince ourselves that we are on the track to achieve what we ever hoped to achieve.
To conclude, I would like to say that any thing we want to achieve in life must be based on a strong foundation of why we want to do a certain thing. Therefore it is of utmost importance that we create a goal for ourselves that is worthy for the greater good and helps us keep going in the exacting situations.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Our
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Message: Did you mean 'anything'?
Suggestion: anything
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, if, look, so, then, therefore, well, while, as to, in other words, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 14.8657303371 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 33.0505617978 169% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 58.6224719101 123% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2215.0 2235.4752809 99% => OK
No of words: 489.0 442.535393258 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.52965235174 5.05705443957 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70248278971 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63018044773 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 215.323595506 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482617586912 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 680.4 704.065955056 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 6.24550561798 256% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.6087380286 60.3974514979 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.3043478261 118.986275619 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2608695652 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.26086956522 5.21951772744 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164290604067 0.243740707755 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0480452387315 0.0831039109588 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0518398967973 0.0758088955206 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0931594582026 0.150359130593 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0473660379132 0.0667264976115 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 14.1392134831 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 48.8420337079 137% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.99 12.1639044944 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 100.480337079 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.