Some people say that all secondary and higher secondary school student should be taught how to manage money as it is an important life skill.
Do you agree or disagree with this argument?
Nowadays,managing money is considered as a significant because it provides the three basic necessities of life namely food ,shelter and clothes. I strongly agree that pupils ought to learn the insights of financial management.
To begin with, learning how to manage money is beneficial for high school children. First,it is extremely good for their future because at this tender age they will be able to manage their wealth. Second,they value for money and hard work of their parents because of this, they cut their unnecessary expenses and stay away from bad habits. Finally,money management persuade children to plan for future academic studies. As a result, it also greatly reduces the burden on their parents.
On the other hand,learning money management at high school also has drawbacks. Students are immature they cannot grasp the subject properly so they have improper thoughts about money. Moreover, students are pressurised due to their academic subjects. If one more subject added in study then children's burden is increased and they cannot concentrate on their academic subjects. Furthermore, when children learn how to save money then they became money minded and show less respect to emotional, cultural and social life.
In gist, I would like to say that managing money is crucial for children and it leads to mature,sincere and capable citizens of the future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, furthermore, if, moreover, second, so, then, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 41.998997996 62% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1168.0 1615.20841683 72% => OK
No of words: 219.0 315.596192385 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33333333333 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.84690116678 4.20363070211 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83415649297 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 176.041082164 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.630136986301 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 359.1 506.74238477 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.6492314079 49.4020404114 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.8461538462 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8461538462 20.7667163134 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.61538461538 7.06120827912 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.01903807615 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158659945806 0.244688304435 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0631014637662 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0436343592298 0.0667982634062 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0964424960223 0.151304729494 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0138601947004 0.056905535591 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.04 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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