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juvenile offenders have been becoming an ever-increasing phenomenon in modern society. consequently, some people opine those teenagers who have offended seriously deserve punishment in the same way as adults. Personally, I firmly oppose this view because a completely identical penalty is normally unnecessary despite the need for a lighter one.
On the one hand, a proper penalty for every offence, minor or serious, is critically important for criminals, victims and every citizen. First, it is appealing to victims because, to some extent, they need a kind of revenge after suffering a lot. Second, although it may sound strange that punishment is beneficial to offenders themselves, actually, a tiny penalty in time usually prevents them from committing more severe crimes, in other words, saving their life eventually. Third, everyone can benefit from a lower crime rate, and all sorts of retribution can work as a deterrent, warning those potential offenders about the up-coming consequence of committing a crime.
On the other hand, separate situations between youngsters and adults determine distinct sentences, normally lighter, even though they had the same criminal behaviour as adults. Initially, many teenagers commit crimes because they may not realize what kinds of behaviour are offences in law for the lack of thorough education about preserving students from offending. Similarly, another exclusive reason for young criminals is the immature mind, and those reasons will be eradicated during maturation through suitable education and life experience. Finally, after rehabilitation, young criminals have more time to contribute to society. consequently, the best retribution for them is to compensate this whole society appropriately, such as compulsory military service or community service rather than to keep them in prison for a long term.
On balance, although it is inevitable that teenagers offenders should also be punished, different measures must be applied for the separate situations between juveniles and adults.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, finally, first, if, may, second, similarly, so, third, kind of, such as, in other words, in the same way, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1762.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 306.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.75816993464 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98908690454 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.633986928105 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 566.1 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.60771543086 118% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.3716152139 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.538461538 106.682146367 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5384615385 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.1538461538 7.06120827912 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.9879759519 276% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0155232733866 0.244688304435 6% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00589594157649 0.084324248473 7% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0138744942603 0.0667982634062 21% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.00733456110749 0.151304729494 5% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0127038324894 0.056905535591 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 13.0946893788 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 22.75 50.2224549098 45% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.3001002004 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.42 12.4159519038 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.83 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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