TPO-12 - Integrated Writing Task
Jane Austen (1775-1817) is one of the most famous of all English novelists, and today her novels are more popular than ever, with several recently adapted as Hollywood movies. But we do not have many records of what she looked like. For a long time, the only accepted image of Austen was an amateur sketch of an adult Austen made by her sister Cassandra. However recently a professionally painted, full-length portrait of a teenage girl owned by a member of the Austen family has come up for sale. Although the professional painting is not titled Jane Austen, there are good reasons to believe she is the subject.
First, in 1882, several decades after Austen's death, Austen's family gave permission to use the portrait as an illustration in an edition of her letters. Austen's family clearly recognized it as a portrait of the author. So, for over a century now, the Austen family itself has endorsed the claim that the girl in the portrait is Jane Austen.
Second, the face in the portrait clearly resembles the one in Cassandra's sketch, which we know depicts Austen. Though somewhat amateurish, the sketch communicates definite details about Austen's face. Even though the Cassandra sketch is of an adult Jane Austen, the features are still similar to those of the teenage girl in the painting. The eyebrows, nose, mouth, and overall shape of the face are very much like those in the full-length portrait.
Third, although the painting is unsigned and undated, there is evidence that it was painted when Austen was a teenager. The style links it to Ozias Humphrey, a society portrait painter who was the kind of professional the wealthy Austen family would hire. Humphrey was active in the late 1780s and early 1790s, exactly the period when Jane Austen was the age of the girl in the painting.
The passage and the lecture both discusses about the originality of the jane austins picture. The writer feels that there are three reasons to support the fact that the portrait depicts jane austen.The lecturer challenges the claims made by the author. he believes that the picture does not belong to jane austen.
Firstly, the author argues that austen family had given a picture in 1882 to be illustrated in the edition of her letter which they believed to be her.this specific statement is challenged by the speaker. he suggests that the family members would have never seen her since her death occurred 70 years earlier than 1882. Hence, he does not believe the arguments to be convincing.
Secondly, the passage comments that a sketch of young jane austin in known to belong to her sister Cassandra and it resembles closely to the portrait provided by the family. this however, is refuted by the speaker. he explains that there were several female relatives in their family who had similar features to the young jane austin. Additionally, experts have found that the teenage picture belonged to her niece Mary ann.
Thirdly, the author posits that the style of the picture shows that it was drawn by a painter who was usually hired by wealthy family.The painter was active during the period of 1780 to 1790 which was the teenage period of jane austin suggesting that the austin family might have hired him. In contrast, the speaker clarifies this by providing the information of the canvas sold did not exist in the period of jane austen.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 199, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...t that the portrait depicts jane austen.The lecturer challenges the claims made by ...
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Line 1, column 199, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...t that the portrait depicts jane austen.The lecturer challenges the claims made by ...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
...allenges the claims made by the author. he believes that the picture does not belo...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
...statement is challenged by the speaker. he suggests that the family members would ...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...to the portrait provided by the family. this however, is refuted by the speaker. he ...
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Suggestion: He
...his however, is refuted by the speaker. he explains that there were several female...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hor posits that the style of the picture shows that it was drawn by a painter who...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...who was usually hired by wealthy family.The painter was active during the period of...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the speaker clarifies this by providing the information of the canvas sold did n...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 7.30242825607 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 12.0772626932 124% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 22.412803532 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 30.3222958057 115% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1299.0 1373.03311258 95% => OK
No of words: 263.0 270.72406181 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9391634981 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02706775958 4.04702891845 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39596831581 2.5805825403 93% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 145.348785872 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539923954373 0.540411800872 100% => OK
syllable_count: 396.9 419.366225166 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.053236922 49.2860985944 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.25 110.228320801 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9166666667 21.698381199 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.08333333333 7.06452816374 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 4.19205298013 215% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.314173987081 0.272083759551 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105640143587 0.0996497079465 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0700213942566 0.0662205650399 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187530083254 0.162205337803 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0461161086433 0.0443174109184 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.3589403974 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 53.8541721854 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.2367328918 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.42419426049 106% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 63.6247240618 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.