“Techcorporation is our top pick for investment this term. We urge all of our clients to invest in this new company. For the first time in ten years, a company that has developed satellite technology has been approved by the FTA to compete with the current satellite provider. That company is Techcorporation. A consumer survey last year indicated that over eighty percent of respondents were dissatisfied with the current satellite television provider and would want to switch to another provider if the industry were not a monopoly. Thus, the new venture of Techcorporation into satellite television will prove to be highly profitable for those who invest now.”
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the advice and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the advice.
The author of the newletter, is advicing to invest in 'Techcorporation' citing varoius reasons for same. The author claims that it is the first company in ten years, to compete with the current satellite provider. To further strengthen the advice, author putforths the data of a survey in which the consumers have portrayed a dissatification with their current television provider. Consdering all the arguments of author, the advice does look enticing, there still some questions that need to answered before investing the new venture.
Firstly, the author has not provided any detailed background of the new company like, by whom is being funded presently, the people behind this new venture, total evealuation of the company,etc. An investor needs to such basic details about a company before investing, especially if it is new company that is going to compete with an estabilished company which has a monopoly on the market. Knowing that the company has necessary resources and a right set of people to direct it would give the investors a mental piece of mind.
Secondly, author should have given some vital details like the startegy that the company is going to adopt to compete with a company having a monopoly in the market. Knowing that the company has a well laid-out plan to take-on the market, can make the investors confident about the success of the new venture.
Thirdly, the author fails provide some of the most basic details of the survey that was carried out last year. The author should have mentioned the size of survey, that is, the number of people who participated, region where the survey was carried out and most importantly the questions that were being asked in the survey. It could be possible that survey was carried out in a small particular area and the current satellite television provider has problems only in that area. Had the author given such details of the survey, the investor would have been more convinced with the survey results.
Lastly and most necessarily the author has not mentioned the investment plan to its clients. Considering that there are some risks involved in investments, author should have mentioned a much to invest would be safe for the investors.
To conclude, if such
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 373 350
No. of Characters: 1818 1500
No. of Different Words: 167 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.395 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.874 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.542 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 140 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 96 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 58 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.867 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.992 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.533 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.369 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.68 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.119 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 190, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , etc
...enture, total evealuation of the company,etc. An investor needs to such basic detail...
^^^^
Line 5, column 102, Rule ID: ADOPT_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'adapt to'?
Suggestion: adapt to
...e startegy that the company is going to adopt to compete with a company having a monopol...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, lastly, look, second, secondly, so, still, then, third, thirdly, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 16.3942115768 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1867.0 2260.96107784 83% => OK
No of words: 372.0 441.139720559 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0188172043 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6487103562 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 204.123752495 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.470430107527 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 575.1 705.55239521 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.6754857664 57.8364921388 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.6875 119.503703932 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.25 23.324526521 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5625 5.70786347227 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16349065998 0.218282227539 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0625149005751 0.0743258471296 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0565972670693 0.0701772020484 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0837292026267 0.128457276422 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0621198837251 0.0628817314937 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.3799401198 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 98.500998004 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.