Multicultural societies, in which there is a mixture of different ethnic
peoples, bring more benefits than drawbacks of a country. To what
extent do you agree or disagree?
In the modern era of globalization, the presence of multicultural communities is more likely than before. It has been debatable whether this kind of mixture is beneficial to the whole society or it is detrimental. I, personally, believe that the merits of a multicultural community outstrip its demerits.
Firstly, the presence of diverse cultural backgrounds will enrich the education system. It is irrefutable that multilingual education is better than a system based on one language. Bilingual students showed to have better communication skills and less liable to have cultural problems when traveling abroad. Besides, this type of education promotes creativity. In a study conducted int the USA, the grades of bilingual students were significantly better others who speak only English. Therefore, a community that contains people from different cultural backgrounds should have a better education system.
Secondly, there is a high competition among individuals from different cultures to secure a high-paid job. People will strive to have better job qualifications. Only well-trained persons could find a job in such communities. For example, in Canada, every year, more than 125000 new immigrants compete together to find vocations. Thus, not only does a multicultural society have better education but also has a highly competitive job market.
On the other hand, such communities may have minorities problems such as racial discrimination. History is full of examples where the majority dominated minority groups. For example, until the last century, American black people had fewer rights and privileges when compared to white. Therefore, if the authorities cannot protect the minorities’ rights, the society will face many hardships which can negatively affect its development and progress.
To conclude, a multicultural community has pros and cons; nevertheless, in my opinion, the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, if, may, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, kind of, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 11.0 24.0651302605 46% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1670.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 288.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.79861111111 5.12529762239 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.26845868034 2.80592935109 116% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.614583333333 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 531.9 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.5176095721 49.4020404114 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 87.8947368421 106.682146367 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.1578947368 20.7667163134 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.78947368421 7.06120827912 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0856373196374 0.244688304435 35% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0264542968567 0.084324248473 31% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0328849835354 0.0667982634062 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0516844054406 0.151304729494 34% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.038071842969 0.056905535591 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.33 50.2224549098 78% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.77 12.4159519038 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.59 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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