Young people enjoy life more than older people do
people usually believe that age is not a factor to determine how much a person enjoys his/her life. however, I am strongly of the belief that younger people enjoy life more than older people do. I firmly believe in this idea due to several reasons which are explained in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, it is commonly observed that young people are more impulsive than older people. Although, being impulsive doesn't always indicate enjoyment, but, in most cases an impulsive person enjoys life more than a non-impulsive person. hence, the younger generation are willing to spend money on enjoying life more than the older generations. The choices of young people are based more on enjoying and living life impulsively instead of worrying about their future and securing a well-settled career. young people usually love challenges, and hence, are not afraid of changing their jobs and careers if they are not satisfied with their current job or they are not enjoying their field of work. I have to admit that my opinion is profoundly influenced by my own personal experiences. my elder brother, who is 28 years old and currently working as a software engineer at Facebook, changed his job an year back when he wasn't satisfied with his previous job at a small startup company. he was willing to take the risk of shifting jobs since he quit his job without any gurantee of obtaining another better paying job. however, my father, who has been working in the same company for the past 30 years, has never given a thought of shifting jobs, though he has never enjoyed working at his company. therefore, young people give more priority to enjoying their work, and hence, their life more than older people.
Secondly, young people are not bound by responsibilities in the same way that the older people are. hence, it allows them to enjoy life with more freedom, and need not worry about family and kids like old people. this gives them the freedom of choice to take risky decisions in order to enjoy life. however, old people need to think carefully about their families and future before taking any risky decisions, since, their family is also affected by the choices they make. take for instance, the people who perform adventurous activities like scuba diving and bungee jumping. it is observed that 90% of the people who perform such dangerous activities are between the age of 18-25. The reason behind this observation is that, the older people are not willing to take the risk involved in such activities, and thus, they do not undergo such activities even though they might have a strong liking towards such adventurous sports. therefore, younger people are willing to take the additional risk to enjoy life than older people.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that people enjoy their life more when they are at a young age, as opposed to when they are old. The above examples prove my stance on this particular opinion, and provides concrete evidence to prove my point.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, for instance, in conclusion, in most cases, to begin with, in the same way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2501.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 507.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93293885602 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74517233601 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46140254012 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.46942800789 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 782.1 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.7119929896 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.739130435 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0434782609 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52173913043 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.5376344086 307% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.508513084562 0.236089414692 215% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.182176107933 0.076458572812 238% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.171814812401 0.0737576698707 233% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.344684790412 0.150856017488 228% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.099085222803 0.0645574589148 153% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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