Some say that because many people are living much longer, the age at which people retire from work should be raised considerably.
Since the industrial revolution, the average lifespan has dramatically increased. Even just 100 years ago, many diseases that today are perfectly treated were potentially fatal such as the infections. The result is that the overall quality of the life has improved and the people live longer. This tendency has raised a question whether is fair to increase the retirement age proportionally to a longer lifespan. I totally agree with these proposal because it is beneficial both for the older people and for the young ones.
Many findings underline the importance to maintain the mind active. Wen the elders end to work, usually they are considered as non productive members of the society, even if they are physically active. Contrary to the past, a 60 year old person is usually in an good health, if this person simply stay at home, neglecting every activity, his mind surely will slow down, because the lack of exercise, leading to a lot of mental diseases such as depression and the Alzheimer's.
Another reason to raise the retirement age is that workplace needs people with experience. The younger workers can learn better if they work together with more experienced employees because, even if they usually have a higher qualification, learning skills directly on the job, from people who are on the place since decades,
is a totally different thing.
For this reason, I believe, that an increase in the retirement age is highly recommended for the older workers, for the newer ones and generally for the society.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 435, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this proposal' or 'these proposals'?
Suggestion: this proposal; these proposals
...a longer lifespan. I totally agree with these proposal because it is beneficial both for the o...
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Line 5, column 260, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...ast, a 60 year old person is usually in an good health, if this person simply stay...
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Line 9, column 122, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
...perience. The younger workers can learn better if they work together with more experie...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 41.998997996 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1286.0 1615.20841683 80% => OK
No of words: 252.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10317460317 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98428260373 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74216111741 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.611111111111 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 412.2 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.9008147055 49.4020404114 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.909090909 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9090909091 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.36363636364 7.06120827912 19% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219263741556 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0816939597188 0.084324248473 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0674300973783 0.0667982634062 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0948613969315 0.151304729494 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0787583683093 0.056905535591 138% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.49 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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