A company is going to give some money either to support the arts or to protect the environment. Which do you think the company should choose? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
If you were the manager of a big company, would you spend money on cultural matters? Like an artistic event. some people believe, art society must be self-funded and nobody does not have to pay them while in the viewpoint of others, art is more important than most of the things and could affect everything in a society. personally, I suggest taking money on arts can lead to a better culture, which means, every person who has affected by the piece of art may protect the environment by himself. Thus, An artist by thinking about a crucial up to date subject about the environment, such as global warming, can help many people to gain more attention to that concern. I feel this way for several reasons, which I will explore in the essay below.
First of all, what scientist means by talking about the effects of the arts in society? Indeed, the arts are a variety of events, shows, exhibitions, games, etc. every one distinguished from another one by some elements, however, the thing in common by all is the interaction with the people who are audiences of them. An art project can assist the government to protect the environment without taking rules about them. in other words, art could inspire people to be in an appropriate relationship with their living place. My personal experience is a compelling example of this, I directed a piece of theater which was about air pollution and healthy life in the city. this artwork made people think more about the unsuitable condition of living in big cities.
Secondly, private company taxes can be reduced by helping to artistic groups and individuals. On the other hand, the art must attain money by people and companies not by the government. The result of the help from the government to the artist is a low trust of the society to that artist. For instance, in many tottaliter countries, the leaders manage to make their art project by huge investments in arts, so this model of the art couldn't make sense in the audience. Conversely, the artist who is trustworthy for the society he lives in, make artworks in his own not by help of the government. For instance, a friend of mine who tried to be popular in the world of art, made a wrong decision by working in a television which is supported by the government. Hence, no one could not believe him as a pure artist because he preferred money than a suitable face of an artist.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that it is better for a company to support the art because of the vital role of the art in changing the behavior of the people in the environment and because of the influence of being independent for an artist.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
conversely, first, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, while, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, such as, talking about, first of all, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 86.0 52.1666666667 165% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2169.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 469.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62473347548 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65364457471 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63753440902 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494669509595 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 686.7 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.4530805796 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.285714286 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3333333333 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.90476190476 5.45110844103 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170831229367 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.050965187104 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0403461707441 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111787871249 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0205149627256 0.0645574589148 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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