Obesity was once considered a disease of adults;however, it is becoming increasingly common among children.Why do you think this is happening?What can be done to help children stay healthy?
Nowadays, advances in technology have changed the lives of people and even affected the health of people, so that obesity has increased dramatically not only in adults but also in children.I will state my reasons in the following paragraphs.
Overweight and obesity is one of the health and nutritional problems in the world and in Iran. The number of overweight and obese patients is increasing in both developed and developing countries, including Iran. This problem is more rapidly observed in children and adolescent.
Environmental and lifestyle factors include inappropriate eating behaviors such as eating high-calorie foods, ready-to-eat restaurants, low-fat snacks, and high-fat foods that are prone to overweight and obesity. The availability of high-calorie foods in the child's environment, such as home, childcare, school and playgrounds, encourages the child to consume these substances, resulting in overweight and obesity. Decreased physical activity ,excessive use of computers, watching TV for a long time, and reduced opportunities for outdoor play will cause some of the energy absorbed by the body to be absorbed by the body's nutrients. Weight and obesity. Note that children who watch television 5 hours a day are 5 times more likely to be overweight and obese than other children.
Today, about one in every five children and adolescents in developed countries is obese or overweight. This extra weight puts the baby at risk for serious health problems such as diabetes, heart disease and asthma. Childhood obesity also has emotional effects.But there are many ways you can help your child.Develop healthy habits. The best way to fight or prevent childhood obesity and overweight is to work with the whole family to have a healthier lifestyle. Choosing better and healthier foods and having more activity, regardless of weight control, is beneficial to everyone.If your children find that you eat vegetables, are constantly on the move, and reduce the time they sit in front of the TV, they are likely to do the same.Exercise in different ways every day. Be yourself, do whatever you enjoy. Explain to your children what you are doing and ask them to join you.
In conclusion,I believe that having a proper diet and regular exercise can eliminate the problems of overweight in children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 10.4138276553 259% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1966.0 1615.20841683 122% => OK
No of words: 366.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37158469945 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00115562959 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573770491803 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 610.2 506.74238477 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 75.1594844107 49.4020404114 152% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.647058824 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5294117647 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.41176470588 7.06120827912 34% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214004236843 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0755858087757 0.084324248473 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0597975969147 0.0667982634062 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112415502667 0.151304729494 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0553288929676 0.056905535591 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 78.4519038076 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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