Women are better at childcare than men therefore they should focus more on raising children and less on their working life.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Although the care of children has traditionally been the role of women, nowadays many men have decided to stay at home to raise children while the woman in the family goes to work. However, some people believe that women have a natural ability for childcare and this role should be left to them. I disagree with this for the following reasons.
Firstly, both men and women have qualities which are important for bringing up and educating children. These qualities are not specific to men or women, therefore both genders are able to raise children successfully. By saying that childcare is a specific female role, children will receive a message which portrays women as carers only. For example, young girls who are taught to believe that the place of women is in the home may not try hard in school subjects which are more male dominated, such as science.
Secondly, the role of women in the workplace has changed significantly in the last fifty years. Many women now hold senior positions in many areas of employment. Women contribute a range of skills to the workplace which are both valuable and important. In my opinion, women should continue to focus on their careers and ensure that their daughters are aware of the opportunities which are available to them in life. Men should also take on some of the responsibility of childcare and teach their sons that this is a valuable role in society for men as well as women.
In conclusion, it is important that men and women share childcare duties because both genders have important qualities and skills. However, women and men should also be allowed to focus on their careers and provide strong role models for children.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 441, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...o them in life. Men should also take on some of the responsibility of childcare and teach t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1402.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 287.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8850174216 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56751162918 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 176.041082164 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.501742160279 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 444.6 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.2627871491 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.142857143 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.9285714286 7.06120827912 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.282374167759 0.244688304435 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10614432506 0.084324248473 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0551226177241 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185171192082 0.151304729494 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0260682783101 0.056905535591 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.0946893788 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 12.4159519038 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 78.4519038076 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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