Advertising creates unnecessary, and artificial, wants and desires.
I am convinced advertising is aiming to persuade consumers to buy their products. However, it has become a severe concern today that advertisements propagate only the brighter side of the product and encourage people to follow the latest trends. As a result, advertising creates unnecessary, and artificial, wants and desires. Hence, it manipulates consumers to buy their products that are not essential for their daily life.
The main idea is that advertisements only propagate the brighter side of their products to persuade consumers to buy it. Thus, it provides an incomplete image of the product to consumers. Consequently, consumers will gain desires to buy the products as it has no shortcoming. Who will not buy perfect products? A great example of this is the weight loss supplement; most of the advertisements would only mention how women can lose weight just in 10 days by eating their products. However, they do not mention the harms and side effects that the supplement would cause. Therefore, many of the female consumers would gain desires to buy supplements and not doing tiring fitness.
Additionally, advertisements also encourage people to follow the latest trends through marketing. It has become an intimation for people to buy certain new products; otherwise, they will become outdated. This is especially happening within students. Although most of the school in Australia has banned students to use the smart phone in school, every junior student having a smart phone has become a normal phenomenon; if there is one student who does not have a smart phone, he or she will be seen as a ‘freak’.
In conclusion, through the method of only propagates the brighter side of the product, and encourage people to follow the latest trend, advertising creates unnecessary desires and manipulates people to buy products.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 503, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... smart phone, he or she will be seen as a 'freak'. In conclusion, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, hence, however, if, so, therefore, thus, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1567.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 296.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29391891892 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05870699132 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.503378378378 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 477.9 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.3674943575 49.4020404114 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.9375 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4375 7.06120827912 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162370403688 0.244688304435 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.079249212753 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.20618482725 0.0667982634062 309% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117761857038 0.151304729494 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.117779253369 0.056905535591 207% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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