new technologies have changed the way for children to spend their free time. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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new technologies have changed the way for children to spend their free time. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Whilst the advanced technology is revolutionizing the leisure life of the youth, I believe that we should pay more attention to the drawbacks of the phenomenon in terms of its detrimental effects on children's personality development and behaviour

Superficially, it cannot be alienated that the entertainment and social life of children have been diversified thanks to the appearance of new technologies such as computers and the Internet. For example, living in a world connected by the ubiquitous Internet, children are now able to make new friends with peers at any corner of the world just by a few clicks. Next to that, it is undeniable that children acquire sets of useful skills from video games which help them to succeed in life and future careers

Hower, beyond these seemingly benefits, there are potential risks of this technical trend. Firstly, the virtual world isolates young people from the real world, causing them to be alienated from friends and family relatives in real life. Moreover, the trend results in numerous physical as well as psychologial problems among young people such as depression, indifference, etc. Apart from that, it is impossible to ignore the mass of obscene content on the internet that can seriously affect the children's minds negatively. Being exposed to these materials, children are prone to imitate the behaviours which can lead to unforeseeable consequences. Last but not least, these forms of entertainment is highly addictive since these platforms are constructed by algorithms that cause people to be engrossed in them. Being addicted to these entertanment platforms leads to drastic consequences in mental and physical well-being.

In conclusion, the disadvantages of the trend outweigh the advantages, and it is crucial that more attention should be paid on the negative influence on the next generation inflicted by new technologies

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, moreover, so, well, apart from, for example, in conclusion, such as, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1596.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 297.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37373737374 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08519310386 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.589225589226 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 486.0 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 91.5390627 49.4020404114 185% => OK
Chars per sentence: 159.6 106.682146367 150% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.7 20.7667163134 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.4 7.06120827912 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.125065447133 0.244688304435 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0454804815684 0.084324248473 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0516244032931 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.090289339623 0.151304729494 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0529108174743 0.056905535591 93% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.7 13.0946893788 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 50.2224549098 84% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.46 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.59 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 31.5 9.78957915832 322% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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