People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.
There is a great debate about individuals spend time on personal delight instead of things they should do. Despite the fact, there are differing opinions. Some people think that doing personal enjoyment can help to improve the efficiency of their work. Other people, however, argue that it is beneficial in many ways for people to not expect to do things they like because it is not possible. I, myself, agree with the first argument.
In this essay, I will address three potential benefits of doing personal enjoyment.
First of all, When a person does things, she or he delights to do it, as a result, the performance will be higher and the output will be much effective. For example, My friends likes to do music very much, but his parents forced him to do professional sports. Although he is doing what they wanted but he is not happy and doesn’t care that much about performance. Maybe, If they let him work on music, he would get more successful.
second, continuously individuals spend more vitality and time for things they like to do instead of things they don’t like.
as a result, individuals are would appreciate their time whereas they are doing things they like. For occasion, One of my friends always in office attempts to finish their errands which don’t like and begin what she incline toward to do.
To sum up, I believe doing what you pleased to do is much effective and more beneficial. This is why always we should do what we like to do.in differentiating, Doing things with you appreciate would bring up your vitality,and unquestionably, he or she would spend more time to do it which is positive see. Hence, this sees is much superior.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, may, second, so, whereas, for example, as a result, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1382.0 1977.66487455 70% => OK
No of words: 290.0 407.700716846 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76551724138 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63133048455 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 212.727598566 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.537931034483 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 414.0 618.680645161 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.8253555479 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.375 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.125 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6875 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.590376497122 0.236089414692 250% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.20567191206 0.076458572812 269% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.141720654294 0.0737576698707 192% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.336308340642 0.150856017488 223% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101213401358 0.0645574589148 157% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.09 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.36 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 86.8835125448 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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