o you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Last decade, famous people had a very specific circumstances between people especially young adults. The young generation usually follow them in various ways. In my point of view, I believe that it is true that young adults care more about such big people compare to old people. In this essay I am going to describe three main reasons to be proven.
First of all, young generation always buy magazines and newspapers, and watch movies to see those famous celebrities. But old generation are not interested to buy magazines and use other media to follow up them and get their opinions. As a result, nothing to see and nothing to follow. For example, a guy with age twenty always like to be in good style and go somewhere that famous people use to go and use to buy their cloths, so she or he should buy those sources to get data where they go for shopping and having fun. On the other hand old one never wants to be in style because he or she don’t need to be up to dated for what they wear and what they buy.
Secondly, most of the time famous people are in a successful category which many people likes to know the secret of their success, so young adults always like to listen to them and follow their life to see how they can be like them. As a result, always they follow their life style, and food style. For instance, a famous artist in television with a good shape and good face have a specific story which she came from poor family and finally with hard working she reaches to this point. This gives other common people specially young one to believes that she can do, as the actress did.
Thirdly, famous people always are in good shape with kind of cloths wearing that young adults enjoy to watch compare to old generation. Because of the different point of view and life style that they have. To make this point clear, some famous artist use to wear open cloths which is not sufficient for grandfathers or grandmothers to see and wear but their kids like to wear same cloths because they follow their own idol .
To sum up, always is good to know that day by day people view and the way of thinking will change and young generation always try to be up to date with their lovely idols which are famous such as athletes and follow their opinion, although old generation sometime are following them but most of the time it is difficult for them to bear these kind of thinking and opinions.
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- tpo48 integrated writing
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'circumstance'?
Suggestion: circumstance
...cade, famous people had a very specific circumstances between people especially young adults...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... circumstances between people especially young adults. The young generation usual...
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Message: Use simply 'celebrities'.
Suggestion: celebrities
...wspapers, and watch movies to see those famous celebrities. But old generation are not interested ...
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...ollow up them and get their opinions. As a result, nothing to see and nothing to ...
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... see and nothing to follow. For example, a guy with age twenty always like to be ...
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Line 2, column 391, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...yle and go somewhere that famous people use to go and use to buy their cloths, so s...
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Suggestion: used
...ewhere that famous people use to go and use to buy their cloths, so she or he shoul...
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Line 2, column 594, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[2]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'doesn’t'.
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... wants to be in style because he or she don’t need to be up to dated for what they we...
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Message: Did you mean 'used'?
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...ke this point clear, some famous artist use to wear open cloths which is not suffic...
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Suggestion: .
...loths because they follow their own idol . To sum up, always is good to know that...
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Line 5, column 338, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
...e time it is difficult for them to bear these kind of thinking and opinions.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, for example, for instance, kind of, such as, as a result, first of all, it is true, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1962.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 442.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.43891402715 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.22588015031 2.67179642975 83% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.445701357466 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 608.4 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 82.3439490889 48.9658058833 168% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.411764706 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2941176471 5.45110844103 189% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198288349348 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0713770407759 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0394778739956 0.0737576698707 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128783097689 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0260968991612 0.0645574589148 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 58.1214874552 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.77 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.93 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.