Television sporting shows such as Olympics to motivate the youth who do not like to exercise much. Do you agree or disagree?
In recent years, telecasting sports such as Olympics have increasingly become popular with the young, which encourages them to do more physical activities. Personally, I partly agree that these sport channels play the most crucial role in changing young people’s thought.
There are several benefits to watching sporting events on television, which not only inspires young people to engage in sports, but also helps them understand sport regulations. Firstly, when adolescents watch sports and games on television, they are likely to feel the temptation to play these sports. For instance, many teenagers tend to go in for this sport after learning about it from the media. Secondly, thanks to the sporting shows, all the rules and technical specifications are widely popularized and therefore they can employ what they know into practice. In my country, most of children understand the positions of players or even they know how to win their opponents in the football match.
However, I believe that an unhealthy amount of time of screen time has an adverse impact on physical state of youngsters. On the one hand, although watching sporting events give teenagers the full enjoyment and happiness, it may cause some detrimental health issues such as obesity and eye-sight problems. In particular, a large number of children in Viet Nam undergo rapid weight gain due to spending too much time watching sports. On the other hand, addiction to a variety of sporting programs is main culprit, which leads to a sedentary lifestyle for children. As a result, if bad habits are gradually formed, the youth can suffer from various health issues at their early age because of preference for sports shows.
In conclusion, despite the inspiration of watching television program, I am convinced that young people had better play sports in lieu of watching them on television.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 583, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the children') or simply say ''most children''.
Suggestion: most of the children; most children
...they know into practice. In my country, most of children understand the positions of players or ...
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Line 5, column 322, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
... and eye-sight problems. In particular, a large number of children in Viet Nam undergo rapid weig...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, for instance, in conclusion, in particular, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1577.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 301.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23920265781 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76236207862 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.637873754153 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 466.2 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.132077148 49.4020404114 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 121.307692308 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1538461538 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.3846153846 7.06120827912 175% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149671838145 0.244688304435 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0490237462306 0.084324248473 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.038877676547 0.0667982634062 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0907406173532 0.151304729494 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0430043222622 0.056905535591 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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