Your children go to a local school that requires volunteers to accompany school science trips.
Write a letter to the school to apply to be a volunteer. In the letter:
– Introduce yourself and give details of your children who attend the school
– Explain why you are interested in the position
– Talk about any relevant experience that you have with children
Dear Sir,
My name is Jot and my daughter is studying at your school. Her name is Ria and she is currently studying in the second class and a star performer in the class. Yesterday, when I came to drop her I have seen a notice placed on the notice board near the school gate saying, a volunteer required to accompany science trips. I would like to apply for the position.
I have done my Master of Physics from the University of Western Ontario, Canada. I have worked with different firms for hand-on-experience. Currently, I am working as a physics lecturer in the University of Western Ontario and also use to give some guest lectures in different universities and colleges. I am very keen on learning and teaching science hence, I want to apply for the volunteer position.
Most of the time, I teach children from the neighborhood who cannot afford the fee of the school and college. I am very passionate about my profession. Moreover, I feel that it fun to make students learn science with different tools and techniques. I am always available at your disposal. If you found my relevant as per the position, kindly please give me a call on 9867654554.
Look forward to hearing positive from your end.
Yours Faithfully,
Jot
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Hi, Can you please review my…
Hi, Can you please review my answer? and let me know where do i stand?
Respected Principal,
I am John Krasinski, a resident of Santa Clara county. I am rejoiced to hear about the program initiated by Bosco school, starting this fall. My kids, Jim - grade 6 and Dwight - grade 5, are both students at Bosco school. Recently, they shared the news about our school looking for volunteers to accompany kids to nearby school for science trips. I am writing this letter to officially apply to be one of the esteemed volunteer.
Being a computer science professor at Santa Clara University (SCU), I realize the importance of exposing our future generation to scienctific advances at early age. Studies have shown that students being aware of various developments in a specific field, tend to scale higher and successful in it. It would be a great opportunity for me to be part of such a social activity. I have organized numerous summer camps during my tenure at SCU from 2003.
I believe my expertise and experience will be of great benefit for the program. I will be available on weekdays after 2pm. Kindly let me know if I can be a part of this amazing initiative.
Regards,
John
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 81, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... University of Western Ontario, Canada. I have worked with different firms for ha...
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Line 4, column 232, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
... University of Western Ontario and also use to give some guest lectures in differen...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, if, look, moreover, second, so, i feel
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 32.9175257732 85% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 26.3917525773 117% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.85567010309 182% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1027.0 937.175257732 110% => OK
No of words: 216.0 206.0 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75462962963 4.54256449028 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.83365862548 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87254621832 2.54303337028 113% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 127.690721649 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.592592592593 0.622605031667 95% => OK
syllable_count: 315.0 290.88556701 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.13402061856 142% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 12.6804123711 118% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 16.3608247423 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.9270353461 44.8134815571 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 68.4666666667 76.5299724578 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.4 16.8248392259 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.4 4.34317383033 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.94845360825 152% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204738120042 0.216113520407 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0597457557806 0.0766984524023 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0582992006519 0.0603063233224 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107894929227 0.12726935374 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0585551810933 0.0580467560999 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.1 8.37731958763 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 70.7449484536 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.68 8.71597938144 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.33 7.59969072165 96% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 41.2886597938 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 8.54432989691 89% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.